Let's Try

When love is about to go into freefall.

Show me the way back

from the edge of this abyss,

give me one more kiss.

 

05/06/19

Author's Note

Reviews

[kentuck14]

Sometimes we just gotta step back on our own!
T.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes I think that is a sage piece of advice Tom. Many thank yous again.

[Gee]

Aye, you've got to work at keeping relationships from going stale, which is easier said than done as we all at times get lost up our own arses. Been married since 1993, met in '91, and love my wife more now than I ever have. She took me, a mixed up mish mash of pieces, and put me together in such a way that I became a much better person. She also gifted me a most beautiful daughter :))

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed both have to work. You are in a beautiful place Gee and you know it so doubly good. Many thanks.

[Chris Shaw]

This senryu could have been called Clutching At Straws. Once that abyss is reached, only a miracle will save the day. Well done John.

Chris

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I think you have it Chris. in my experience that final kiss is one that is hollow and says goodbye! Many thanks.

[barleygirl]

It's always easy to get back together after kissing muddles the mind . . . but then those old sandpaper edges resurface when two estranged people try to function as a pair. I love the hopeful (if somewhat delusional) spirit of your brief sentiments (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah my point was that the kiss is an empty gesture at this stage and few survive. Many thanks Margie.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I think the act of kissing is the most provocative thing between two people. What is love without it?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Kissing is indeed the gateway to many experiences Kelly, I so agree. And so underrated! Many thanks.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think the kiss may actually push the speaker over the edge into the abyss...
swaying precariously....
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I think you may have the point here Jacob. A desperate act of being unable to let go can be more harmful. Many thanks.

[Edie Blue Starfish]

such wonderful brevity!
the one more kiss can mean all the difference between falling and 'falling'