Love's Dissolution

'Against love's fire fear's frost hath dissolution.' - William Shakespeare

Love's Dissolution

We turned our backs

like duelling dukes,

shots exchanged,

flesh wounds inflicted.

We tried to cement

with carnal contentment

but the cracks became crags,

the crags became ravines

as we tumbled

from the warm nest

of romantic idealism,

plummeting like cold stone

into the valley

of love's death.

As we plunged through

the fluffy, overly inflated

pink clouds

of idealistic intentions,

the talons of hurt,

of anger and despair,

tore our flesh

from once pure white bone

and ripped the soul

of devotion

from our chests.

As that frenetic freefall ended

and we came to rest

on earth deflated,

defeated and depressed

as black balloons,

we wondered

why?

How did we fall so far?

02/08/17

Reviews

[wordman]

i guess if it`s just an illusion of love we must fall from our perch

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed we must Ron. Many thanks.

[Dcael]

''as we tumbled from the warm nest of romantic idealism'' Intense and powerful , the turning point of every relationship failed , when you realise two people are not always enough.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed so ella. Many thanks for stopping by.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and honest thoughts shared my friend. Men are foolish. Care too late for what is important and waste away opportunities to do some good things. I liked the question at the ending. Thank you John for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Coyote

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome John.

[Tony Jordan]

The idea of those nests perched on crags and - so precariously - should make anyone still in their nest extremely thankful. Great metaphor. Sad tale mate.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed a common experience these days Tony.See Tic beat Hearts today! Many thanks

[Tony Jordan]

There are still some 'lifers' out there - keep the faith lol.
Yeah...the Scot Prem is a one horser. Needs a good shake-up.
welcome my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sex cannot stand alone as the key to a relationship
working....all the best intentions can fail....and good communication and hearts' work will stop the fall....or not.....
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed so Jacob but many regret matters in the sober light of day but are too far down the road or two ashamed to turn back. Many thanks.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

"Deflated, defeated and depressed as black ballons"-great imagery, simile, alliteration use. Savage emotion-pathos well-expressed. When relationships become 'just sex', the light soon burns itself out. The scars, the scars, still bleed and we feel this in your words. We, as you, are left with only "Why?" Superb writing.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thank yous Annette for expressing this so well.

[DIVYA]

Sex is never enough. And It hurts when one comes to that sad realization. Great poem John....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oh dear Divya sex can be good but often not enough to save the soul of a relationship. Many, many thanks.

[DIVYA]

I agree John...You are so welcome.

[Lorry]

Some killer lines in this wonderful piece my friend. I don't think I will be the only one to recoil in horror at the mention of loves death valley :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you very much Lorry, from one who has been there!