Raptor

Devoured!

Raptor

You cowl around me,

your prey, as you feast upon

my very manhood.

 

01/06/17

Reviews

[Maria]

dude, man that is,,,have no words,...powerful and so short!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah tis a senryu, ie a short form derived from Japan which has five 'on' [syllables], seven 'on and five 'on' Many thanks Maria.

[Maria]

Well that is great! Thanks for letting me know. And truly loved it

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Maria. You should try one, they are fun to do.

[Enchanted-Raven]

Excellent...short yet to the point....enjoyed :) x

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you muchly!

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words. You said a handful of thoughts in so few words. Thank you John for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Coyote for such a nice review.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome John.

[Lydia Shutter]

There are women who do prey on men and for the most part the men thrive in that situation...till they figure out what is really happening. You have said so much in so few words. Good one, John. Lydi**

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yup I agree but many women are in that mirror. Many thanks Lydi!

[MsJewel]

Your words remind me of the fly caught in the black widows web, twisting and turning, waiting to be devoured. Love this little gem John. Really great writing :) Julie

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Julie. Was in the same vein as the black widow as I had been watching the Dutch TV drama of the same name. Many thanks!

[Einstein Noodle]

oh man does that ever hurt! sheesh! so graphic ..i feel the hot breath and the weight of those bat wings ... sharp claws and beak ... menacing and pecking ... oh the pecking away .. do they ever stop pecking ;)
i probably deserved to meet this young lady ..thank the Lord above i never did ... tho i know they are out there ... i see them in the movies ;))) now i realize your raptor can be many things ..i chose a woman ... it was my first impression
E.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed Einstein a woman! Many thanks