Satan's Poison

Some fall so deep.

Satan's Poison

There is no time for love

in a heart so blessed by hate.

For therein lies a darkness,

a treacle like molasses

that  binds the soul

to the devil's bidding.

There is no clear,

sparkling, spring water

with which to nourish

and wash away sin,

for the course is set

within a channel

filled with odious venom,

the juice of Hell's serpent.

Like ground black peppercorns

abhorrence spills forth

to sprinkle all it touches

with that snake's saliva,

strangling and destroying

all that once may

just have been good.

 

02/05/17

Reviews

[Relic]

Wonderfully descriptive poem. I could paste my favorite parts but most of the poem has a chilling effect to it. There are lines (about the snake) that sound as though they come from the bible as a warning.

Smooth stuff.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Relic. All down to my lapsed Catholicism.

[Kelly Scheppers]

"Like ground black peppercorns
abhorrence spills forth
to sprinkle all it touches
with that snake's saliva..."

Although I prefer the melodic side of you, you pen the dark side with great insidious strokes. I do believe I have a chill - masterfully crafted, John!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oh I can rant! Thank you so much Kelly. Have you been away?

[Kelly Scheppers]

I slip away every now and then in an attempt to stir my senses. Thank you for taking notice! ; )

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem.
"There is no time for love
in a heart so blessed by hate.
For therein lies a darkness,
a treacle like molasses"
The above lines could stand alone. Hate is a great sickness. Make us see nothing good or worthwhile. Thank you John for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
that binds the soul

to the devil's bidding.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Glad you enjoyed it and thank you so much Coyote

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy and you are welcome my friend.

[MsJewel]

Your words are dark and powerful...haunting actually. So many great lines, it is hard to pick my favorite. It is a pleasure to read such great poetry. :) Julie

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I am glad you enjoyed it, and thank you Julie.

[Paul Bell]

Apt word, treacle. When you're in it, sticky times lay ahead. Love and hate, both strong words. Yet love starts out first. Like your words.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Paul. You get it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, intense...evil can be sticky like molasses...we get caught in it...i really like your paradox "blessed with hate"
that increases the power of the poem...the "odious venom" of it all...

j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Jacob for such a kind review.

[wordman]

hate,this is what we have become .the world is full of it

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah but the majority of people are good people. In a fast moving world it is so hard not to become insular and stand by while terror happens, armies invade and corporations rape and rob the planet. Thanks Ron.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha John, that is a spiralling dark write. Graphic imagery really sets the scene, "treacle like molasses" what a great line. It is virtually impossible to wash your self clean of satans touch. The snake is also a graphic and powerful image (great symbolism)....
"strangling and destroying
all that once may
just have been good."
Dark, frighteningly good. Izzy

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Izzy