Shipwrecked

Love is hard!

Shipwrecked

When you turned away

I let go the life raft

and crashed upon

the rocks of disaster,

those waves of regret

throwing me beyond salvation.

The icy ocean

seemed so much more inviting

than your rejection.

But the sea refused

to swallow me

and there I was

cast adrift

on an island

bereft of all sensual love.

You, a siren it seems,

whispered your song

of doom

and sealed my fate.

A destiny of searching

in vain,

my justice.

 

22/02/17

Reviews

[MsJewel]

Sad but lovely...the images you have created of the sea set a soothing tone for your heartfelt words. It's always a pleasure to read your outstanding poetry.
:) Julie

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so very much Julie

[Great Aunt Astri]

Oh how unjust of her! Your poem really brings across the feelings of rejection. I love the way you equate that to the natural surroundings.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Great Aunt.

[Mercy Fae Parizeau]

The poem speaks truth. The pain of rejection is accurately painted in each verse. You've done well with the overall "theme" of the piece: Ships, islands, sea.

Very well done.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Mercy Fae

[wordman]

well i`m sure help is on it`s way,no need to die today

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah we poets like to 'milk' emotions Ron. Many thanks

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem.
"You, a siren it seems,
whispered your song
of doom
and sealed my fate."
The above lines. I liked. The sea. Cold and demanding. Thank you John for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Coyote.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome John.

[Hi]

It's good, but the "beyond salvation" and then "sealed my fate" are a bit redundant like saying I died and then died again.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Perhaps Matt? but perhaps not?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

been on that island once too often---how many times can we be and survive?

such desolated loneliness described here.

j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Sad to say we both have Jacob. But we are still in there building our rafts! Many thanks.

[Surya]

One day you can sense your Judgement...A sad write, penned well.
Thank you for sharing...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Surya

[AYVID N]

John, you express the vulneraility and utter dependency on a lover, so totally here and that's very romantic.

You, a siren it seems,
whispered your song
of doom
and sealed my fate.

I love these lines. It is indeed gratifying for someone to know they hold such power over another human. Superbly written!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Divya. I guess in love one must surrender for it to be deep and not simply superficial?

[AYVID N]

Yes and not be afraid to express it fully!