Heart Break

Sadness.

Heart Break

A tear rolls softly

over peach like velvet skin,

she knows it's the end.

 

14/06/15

Author's Note

Reviews

[Robert]

You can really write these senryu's. You write hem with such good word choice and they have such deep meaning. The less words you can write and get the meaning across is a gift.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Robert for your kindness.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Concise but not short of emotion. Very stirring and breaking.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Gosh you are playing catch up today and many thanks for such indulgence Nadia

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Haha doing my best!

[sereenaoutloud]

I am really loving you senryu's ..i think capturing the feeling in such few words is so hard to do but you do it so well.
Sorry repeating again :)..."Over peach like velvet skin" love this description!

[R Smith]

that's just beautiful John, no need to say more, a perfect poem :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I am glad you think so Richard. Thank you.

[AaronFreitas]

No worse feeling than knowing its the end... those tears can't be stopped they will come flooding out like it or not. Nice words :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Aaron

[andrew mitchell]

vivid pictures from the heart John

[John Alexander McFadyen]

From her heart this time Andrew lol! Cheers.

[wordman]

i could picture the whole thing

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you WM

[ANTO]

God those tears are the worst to see. I'd rather see someone bawl and scream and shout than for one of those heart-wrenching tears seep out.
Well penned John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

And there was me thinking you were a big softie! Many thanks Anto.

[ANTO]

Softer than fresh putty in the right hands lol. Your welcome John !!

[Willard Wells]

Nicely done John. Great words about emotional time. A Haiku to be proud of.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Willard. Been in a writing frenzy today lol!

[Willard Wells]

I am out of the driven frenzy at the moment. I am at the 0 to 3 a day. I just have to be careful that I don't force it too much. I have a number of pieces I have started but they just are not coming together yet. It was like being in the writing zone and suddenly it went away in mid write and now I wait for the return of that moment of clarity. Or in my case maybe I am missing the darkness to write from at the moment. All this sunshine and warm weather makes it hard for me to get to my dark writing place. Oh poor poor me. Of course we have no water to speak of.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Writing comes to you when it is ready Willard. That is what I have learned. I never sit down to write. it sits me down. We have plenty of water to spare, wish we could share.

[Willard Wells]

Yes and you have more overcast days to drive your mental state to write I expect. I find on darker days I am more intune with myself and my writing. My ideas seem to come to me at some of the most non opportune times.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

True to an extent Willard but I find laying in the sun inspirational. I go into neutral gear and my mind free wheels.