Icarus Love

No jibes about melted wax please!

Icarus Love

For you I would ride

across the sky to the sun

and bring you the moon.

 

10/06/15

Author's Note

Reviews

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Key word - would! Sadly, Icarus wouldn't be able to make it to the moon while flying up the sunny sky! But nevertheless, for the sake of this poem, let's imagine it a possibility. How wonderful, such devotion for a beloved, with such an extent of wanting to do everything possible for them so they would feel happy and cared for.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Nadia, that is just the message intended.

[sereenaoutloud]

This is a really great write but it does totally remind me of a pick up line, mind you its better than the few i have heard lol

"can i check your label, because it must say made in heaven "

Do men take lesson in this ? hehehe

[John Alexander McFadyen]

LMSO!!!! I am no good at chat up lines. Too shy and get too flustered. Lol Thank you Sereena.

[sereenaoutloud]

oh i have had some really bad ones ..i am convinced that you all get together and make them up lol

[R Smith]

sound like a good plan John but there are probably easier ways to meet women lol, A fine poem though, lovely writing :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Richard. Am working on it lol!

[wordman]

i will have to ponder on this for a while

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No go to the bar and just say it lol!

[wordman]

stuff loke that gets me in trouble john

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hey you can take it WM!

[wordman]

i am tough lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hey man you look it!

[wordman]

between tk little and dan and ana sophia i am looking old

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You my friend are a ROCK!

[andrew mitchell]

If this isn't some Scottish pick up line well nail me to the cross and call me Jesus! I just wanna know if it works cos it has the lines the words that would impress a wee young lassie up to 36 yrs old and after that you are lying lol.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha! You can't use it as Aaron has already claimed it lol! Oh and I have given up women as they are just too expensive, too demanding and too untidy lol! Cheers Andrew.

[andrew mitchell]

Haha I know They didn't teach us this in school instead we got logarithms and trigonometry lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

That adds up Andrew!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah is that what one calls a 'split infinitive'? lol

[andrew mitchell]

lol..................

[AaronFreitas]

I'm going to try this at a bar... could be used as a pickup line. Right amount of drinks and it will work! haha good work buddy!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha, ha! Let me know if it works but if you get slapped the writer accepts no liability lol. Cheers Aaron.

[AaronFreitas]

haha the amount of alcohol will determine which cheeks I get slapped on lmao

[ANTO]

To want to give all that pleases (especially the impossible) is a great part of being in love John. To get burned and keep trying is another.
Good job!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Exactly right Anto.Many thanks.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I adore Greek mythology, ever so brilliantly construed into a senryu! If only the moon was ours to give. Even the thought of it is poetic.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Tis true Kelly. The thought of gifting the moon is bliss. Many thanks.

[Willard Wells]

Nice John. I had a flash of the old movie "It's a wonderful Life", when Jimmy Steward says, "I will lasso the moon for you". Great piece of work.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Willard. The oldies are the best!

[~]

I love that title! Flying with wings of love, to do the impossible.
A die hard romantic you are!! :D

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Some would say sad, lol. Thank you sweet MS.