Frozen in Time

When you are locked in ice!

Frozen in Time

If you talk past the point

you fail to see me;

to see my heart, my needs

and to communicate

that I have touched your breast

and that touch has burnt

into the cavity

where your heart lies

frozen,

welded to ribs so brittle

that they break

in love’s breath.

If you talk past the point

eternity becomes

an empty,

vacuous place,

where no warmth

can melt the thick

ice flows of mistrust.

Where,

I cannot reach in

and pull you from

the frozen fiord

where you lie

in suspended animation.

So open your soul

and receive me

and I will warm you

with love.

 

11/12/14

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

I love this piece. It definitely captures the pain and longing. One thing, I might say burned into instead of burnt, but either way, it's a nice piece.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Tis a cultural thing:
The Verb: “Burned” Versus “Burnt”

“Burned” and “burnt” are both acceptable past-tense forms of the verb “burn,” but which one you use depends on where you live because the verb “burned" is the most common form in the United States, and the verb "burnt" is the most common form in Britain.

Mom burned the muffins.
Mum burnt the crumpets.

The Adjective: “Burned” Versus “Burnt”

When you're using the words as adjectives, then "burnt" is also used in the United States, although "burned" is still an option.

My favorite dessert is burnt cream.
What happened to my burnt umber crayon?
My husband looked at the burnt turkey and suggested we order pizza.

That’s the story: “Burned” and “burnt” are both OK. If you’re in the United States, you’ll sound more natural if you stick with “burned” as the verb and save “burnt” to use as an adjective.
- See more at: http://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/burned-versus-burnt#sthash.qBz67ZHq.dpuf

[Ruth]

Excellent! If only there was more feeling and less talking sometimes...or more listening rather than talking ~ just let the love in and heal...be reached...beautiful xo

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Poppy you understand so beautifully! Thank you.

[Layi Tate]

I couldn't agree more I found my heart twirling in circles with this poem.
Beautiful well written ...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much LT

[Layi Tate]

Your welcome feel free to send me a read request anytime sweetie....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Can't unless we are friends Layi!

[Layi Tate]

Oh I understand .... well lol I'll leave that decision up to you . :p

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Scardy cat!

[Layi Tate]

oh yah o_O I know ... :P

[willweb]

Now who has it bad??? This was like a dance to me, of two hearts, one attempting to lead and the other not so sure of the proper steps...but my friend, never underestimate the power of a soft poetic melody. Nice one John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Why thank you dear heart. Lol!