Wishing

Wishing

These barren years

that have passed

and left this cruel distance

between our hearts

are bitter sweet.

It pains my soul

to know you feel me deeply

and still,

cannot steal yourself

to trust my devotion.

Yet there is resurrecting, reassurance

in knowing that our precious bond

has not been broken,

and the spirit of our desires

continues to burn,

a beacon in the dark night sky.

I watch your star

and wish upon it

with all my strength,

that these hopes and dreams

might one day

soon be lived.

 

10/08/14

Author's Note

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

I believe I am addicted to your formatting There's something about your delivery, how it methodically unravels, then leaves us in awe. That's where I reside whenever I read you...in the state of "awe".

Kelly

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I am so humbled by your very kind support for my writing Kelly. Many, many thank yous!

[Kelly Scheppers]

It's my pleasure, indeed!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

And I thank you dear lady, I thank you.

[Lyn Anderson]

Another wonderful heartfelt write. What I would say though, is consider reworking the first few lines -- something like "these years that passed, leaving this cruel distance" might be more in keeping with the tense of the rest of the piece. But it may be a word count kind of thing, which I do not always focus on.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

As always your eagle eye has won the day. Have spotted the error and amended. Thank you 'M'.

[Lyn Anderson]

No problem, I like to help. Keeps my mind busy.

[Ruth]

A heart wrenching situation, still, where there is hope....and all that...beautiful John x

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Poppy.

[R Smith]

I love these love lost, hopeless love poems, I should most of mine head that way, yours is a fine exhibit of how to write about true love, lost or not.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Cheers Richard!

[MAC]

bittersweet....as is any love that never had the chance to meet its full potential. John, you are a romantic and i get the feeling sometimes a nomad. a true poet sir. wonderful poem!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you for such an accolade sir!

[AprilRN1210]

can feel the longing, the hope, the deep feelings in this piece... to rekindle an old flame, and feel the fires burning just as bright can be a beautiful thing.. It makes me ache for this heartfelt plea and wishes that speak to the heart....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

April you are so kind!