Crucified

Crucified.

You stumble beneath the weight

of the oaken cross

that you yourself fashioned

from your dense forest of fear.

And she who is not free from fear

is not complete in love.

You captured my soul with sweet sermons;

me your chosen disciple,

plucked to serve the dignity

of the hope you offered.

But it is I who ended

nailed through my heart

to those thick wooden planks,

bleeding drop by bloody drop

upon the grey barren earth

of all the promises you made,

of the salvation you foretold,

but that you failed

to honour.

 

27/12/13

Author's Note

Reviews

[Ayvid N]

Hi John!
I was just passing through and you are as awesome as ever!
Betrayal and grief flow through every word here and I could feel the rough, rugged, lonely Cross of pain rest sharp on my shoulders. Very beautifully portrayed. Thank you so much.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Are you not staying a while dear Divya? Many thanks for your always kindness.

[Ayvid N]

I hope to write again soon John. Keep having a great Christmas Season. Many Thanks! :)

[Tom]

Despite the promises it was a barren, thankless love affair !

A soulfully penned poem with pathos aplenty !

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Aye and every word felt. Thank you Tom.

[ferousfinite]

A Sort of Rant in a beautiful way but comes out angry

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I hope hurt rather than angry. Many thanks ff

[Lyn Anderson]

What a beautiful poem, full of loss and anger, grief and pain. It is intense to read this.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many Thanks KLG

[Leigh]

There are some great lines in this heavy poem, I found this quite serious in its parallels to Christ and felt your pain.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Leigh. Hope you are good.

[Mark]

wow, the religious images in this are done well. Very well crafted work sir.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Mark; and to be knighted by you is indeed an honour!

[Jack...]

So often the wounded heart has no choice but to bleed...and question why. Just as often the answers never come. Very cool my friend. Loved your take on this pain.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I agree Jack and many thanks.

[Lydia Shutter]

People who are afraid to love often find every reason in the world why they are not in a relationship...and none of those reasons include shouldering the blame themselves. A well written lament, John. The metaphor is super. Lydi**

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you muchly Lydi