Reborn

Reborn

I have found a new poet.

He was inside me all theses sad and sorry years,

but afraid.

Afraid to open up his lungs and sing,

to open up his heart and spill tears of words

across the virgin parchment sheets of life;

lest his weakness be exposed by that original sin

staining his once pure soul.

So he was afraid to open up his eyes and face the world

in all its magnificent sharp magnification and blunt and selfish hatred.

To chance the inevitable ridicule of those shallow, little people

who have learned to scoff and demean others

and feed their own conceited confidence tricks

through the put down and the snide remark.

But now I stand foursquare,

my squat pen flowing over velum sheets,

an oak shielding my sight from the harshest glare,

as I breathe easily the fragrances of life

and the piety of living in the glow of your sweet nature.

 

08/09/13

Author's Note

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

It is clever, the way you go into a second person narration to tell the story, a really good piece here.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sheema so much

[Great Aunt Astri]

A wonderfully written poem ... I am so glad that your Muse made itself known to you. But I am sligtly confused. At the end you write 'living in the glow of your sweet nature'. Does this refer to the poet in you (And your Muse) or have you found someone really nice who has given you inspiration?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thank GAA. The latter is the truth.

[Great Aunt Astri]

AH it is amazing what love can do!

[AYVID N]

The transformation was inevitable as a new chapter always begins when the previous closes. We had to evolve into someone surer and unafraid. I loved the imagery here, the virgin parchment sheets of life, the oak shield.

Harsh glares, put downs and snide remarks only serve as compliments when a poet is accomplished and at peace with his inner world.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

So many thanks Divya.

[A. H. Pinley]

There's a different ring to this poem. It seems as if you have moved on from a hard time. Great video!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks AHP. More a transient stage than a hard time but many thanks

[ms. barrie]

The title of this poem, is definitely fitting for this write. This is absolutely fantastic work, this completely slammed me up against the wall. Stunning imagery, depicting frustration, sadness, yet a renewal of hope.
Wonderful choice of words and flow. Simply brilliant, John. Thanks for sharing :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Barrie for such a lovely review.

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome, John, this is an enjoyable read :)

[Mark]

Wow this is such a great tribute to many of us who don't often admit to being a poet. Really loved this one brother!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Mark you are very kind and so supportive.

[Jack...]

Loved this one John and it seems a bit different and refreshing which is a nice light to find. Had to stick around a while and listen to the entire song, so I read the poem a few times . Very cool my friend.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Jack. My son got me into G&R a few years ago.

[Leslie Philibert]

John is writing very well, the poems I have read the last two days are excellent.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Coming from a really great poet this is so gratefully received Leslie.

[s y e]

Wow John - You blow me away with this one! I adore the song and your write. You've always been an amazing writer but you poured everything into this one and just wow.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sye