If Heaven Knew

If Heaven Knew

You overcame the love

you professed with ease.

His satanic demands

now you serve to please.

And you do leave me parched,

have stolen all the bread and fruits,

left me scratching dusty earth

and shrivelled, rotting roots.

The roots of love’s true smile,

the tango of desire

we once danced

that set our hearts afire.

Oh how heaven opened

to us then,

who could predict

that it would ever end?

And now I sit alone

my dreams all dashed

upon such a salty death

and all my hope is lost.

 

10/08/13

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

This is indeed a very sad and lonely piece, feeling betrayed and abandoned. Most of us can relate.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You are having a marathon john read. Many thanks KLG

[Lydia Shutter]

When a third party enters a relationship, he or she is often seen as the devil...truth is though, the devil will not stay if he is not welcome. It is sad to be betrayed in this way.....and it takes a long time to trust again. Very emotive and well written. Lydi**

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Lydi

[SHEEMA HUQ]

A nicely told story here of recovery and betrayal, good work.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sheema

[shallimarRose]

"You overcame the love
you professed with ease.
His satanic demands
now you serve to please."

To think one has found love everlasting and then have their hopes cut short is very painful especially if it because someone else had come into the picture. I found this sad but enjoyed the wording especially where you speak of love as a tango. heartfully penned... shallimarRose

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Rose. It was I who entered a parched desert to water a flower. Then the flower faced the scorching sun again where it had withered for a decade.

[Jack...]

Hopefully you have found your hope again my friend. Very well written.

[Frieda P]

Your passion pen is at it again, one never knows John...keep the faith my friend.

The roots of love’s true smile,
the tango of desire
we once danced
that set our hearts afire.

Sigh worthy....simply love your tango.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Frieda

[Leslie Philibert]

I have read a lot of John`s work today, and he writes well.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Sorry for the marathon Leslie. was just trying to write it all out.

[A. H. Pinley]

It sounds like your recovering well. With your head held high and your steps solid, keep on marching my friend. Good piece!

[poetdoug]

Thank you for sharing these passionate words. It must be difficult, but you are doing it in a very artistic way .. Our thoughts and prayers go with you right now my friend.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Doug for your kindness.

[Meesh]

You have great skill when it comes to portraying such deep emotions and darkness within your short, frequent lines. I like the abcb scheme and also how it abruptly stops at your last stanza, almost reiterating your last line and the idea of helplessness and futility.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Meesh I wanted it to end without a direct rhyme. Just like my recent experience.

[Meesh]

I thought so. Very artistic of you. Well done.