On Parchment

On Parchment

What I pen on parchment

are feelings I have known.

Sometimes the abstract ravings

of a sun stroked mind.

A place where dehydration

sucks the inhibition from

poisonous snake bites,

or the thousand cuts

that bleed red from my heart

drain away all hope.

But in the boudoir

I am yours and

you are mine

and in this delicious knowing

we come together

in sweet and private feasts

where I offer you a menu,

a la carte, if you prefer

and you offer it back to me

with the full flavour of desire.

 

07/05/13

Reviews

[Mark]

mmm.. the agony and the ecstasy? The emotional forces that drive our craft are strong ones yes? Always enjoy reading your clear presentation and wonderful imagery.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Agony and ecstacy indeed. The contrast between the fantasy of writing and the reality of life. Thanks Mark.

[rhythm&blues]

Your's is the first poem I've read, I enjoyed your romancing pen on parchment, well done.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks!

[Emerald Seas]

A very powerful romantic write, not only of relationships, but of the poets connection to the pen and parchment. Nicely done!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you kindly QSS.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

The sentiments and imagery, spell out a strong romance, lovely work, well done

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sheema

[Ravyne Hawke]

I like that you let her know that what you write has nothing against the relationship you two share at the moment. I think too often writers get a bum-rap about everything we write must be what is happening at the moment and that just isn't so. We have ghosts from our past that haunt us until we tell their stories. This is a beautifully written piece with great images.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Lori, glad you understand too.

[Rhianne Ney]

I like the flow and the rythm. Well penned~

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Rhianne.

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome

[Zahra]

i really liked this. Very nice flow.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Aaahhh...yes, this is the honesty in pure desire. The offering and the acceptance with a little giving in return. I am also reminded of the days of old, when men would write poetry to woo their lady loves...if it were to happen today, I believe many men would be surprised at how much impact a few simple and well wrought lines would have on a woman. Well written.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Mmmmmm I may just try it one day lol! Many thank GF

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I suggest that you do...I doubt you would be disappointed. lol

[Kristin Lee]

I'm reminded of days long gone when men actually used to write to women as a form of forplay! Not just with the style but through your words. This is a great poem. Provocative, fun, fiesty even, and written with class. Very well done.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thank yous Kristin for such a lovely review.

[Keith LaFountaine]

Man John, you know how to create some damn good imagery. The second poem is candy for my brain. Such intimate images. The only criticism I have is in the final line "marvellous, magnificent Michelin stars". Marvellous and magnificent are very similar words phonetically, so perhaps another synonym for either of them would work as well. Excellent work as always!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Keith. I am not all that sure about the whole line, think I may work on it. Just glad you take the trouble to say what you think. Many thanks.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Done!