Happy Ending

Happy Ending

I remember those sad summers,

laying bare upon the grass,

where passion once had lived

in sweeping, gliding flights

above the sky.

But only sadness left its mark,

soiled fingers on white satin skin

as salty memories seeped

into the wounds you left behind,

and pain was all I had to hold.

I tried so hard to flush out

your pretty poison

of lies and deceit

with the purity of hope’s crystal waters

drawn deep from long dried wells

of arid gritty dreams.

But they had caked salt hard

and only the depth of Karina’s love

could break that spell.

 

06/05/13

Reviews

[redflutterby]

After heartbreak a new love will eventually show itself. At least we can hope. Another lovely write. ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks A.M.S.....

[Mark]

Salt... makes all things taste good right? hurts in the wounds though :P another clear writing with on spot imagery. I always enjoy your work so much I think, because I relate to it as though we are brothers.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Mark. Perhaps we have followed similar paths and I hope where you are now is as blissful as where I find myself.

[A. H. Pinley]

Old love, new love. Faded memories, and memories that stand fast. You always use great word selection. Good work John!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks AHP taking time out on holiday in Norway for a few days.

[Ravyne Hawke]

Beautiful metaphors and images here. I love how this moves from sad to harmonious. All it takes is the love of someone kind and good to offset the worse relationships we've had. Well done here.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you again Lori. It is wonderful how you can find 'life after death'

[s y e]

John, as always I loved it. Loved the description, the imagery and it was metaphorical. I loved it, great job to you!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank yo so much Sye!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

A wilful title which I hope lasts for the duration of your lifetime, a good piece here

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you kindly Sheema and thank you!

[Leslie Philibert]

Excellent, lyrical, well described,metaphorically strong, the kind of poetry that you write very well !

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Leslie

[Frieda P]

Sorry John, I have to go with the kimmer and Keith on this one, misleading title...I was expecting confessions of undying love. If someone wrote me a poem with that title I would hope it would speak to how I blow your mind, and you can't breathe/live without me. Men are from Mars....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Men are from Mars
They drive the cars.
Woman are from Venus
They drive the p****read moreMen are from Mars
They drive the cars.
Woman are from Venus
They drive the p****
Thanks Frieda

[Frieda P]

Ha we do it all honey...what, all of a sudden you're shy! Lol

[Frieda P]

Haha, now it sounds like a massage parlor John! Lol....sorry, couldn't resist.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not shy just aware we have some sensitive folk who get offended by the explicit. Massage parlour, I think not. I would not be seen dead in one lol

[Frieda P]

Well you're all about sexual release, and that's what it brings to mind Lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I reserve my sexual release dear Frieda for the parchment and the parlour. Hey title for our next challenge?

[Frieda P]

Parchment & Parlor no U...ha!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Boudoir did not fit!

[Frieda P]

Ha I already have one under wraps, sure you're allowed to come out and play Lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Under wraps? You mean one you prepared earlier?

[Frieda P]

How quickly they forget...Le Petite Mort

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ok confession. Irushedhome early as the weather is lovely today but taking a turn for the worse. Solaying on my deck soaking up the last evening rays. That makes me dense!

[Frieda P]

I'll give you a pass, only because you're half baked again...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Smokin'

[Frieda P]

Ha!

[Keith LaFountaine]

Hey John, awesome work as always. I do admit that the title seemed a little misleading at first (I was expecting a really romantic poem like you've written in the past) but it wrapped up nicely in the end, which makes the title work in my opinion.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Keith, I do agree but purposely had this as a piece about redemption from tragedy and loss that made it all the more poignant.

[KAOlmsted]

I like it, John, I really do, but here's my one and only issue with the piece: the title suggests this is to be a glowing poem in honor of Karina's love, which would have been so romantic and lovely, but instead it is the same old same old, addressed to the woman (or women) who broke your heart. I like that her love has lifted you out of the depths of despair, but...come on, buddy...stay up there. The air is so much cleaner ;-) With a title like Karina's love, I truly expected to feel all warm and fuzzy after reading it. Instead I feel like you're just, well, rubbing it in to the former lover(s).

But, like I said...I did like it ;-) Thanks for sharing this with us.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I get your point Kimmer but Karina will not see it thus as she knows what I feel and think. I have tio compare the 'loves' I acquiesced into with the real love she has given to me.

[KAOlmsted]

Fair enough.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The former lovers will never know of Karina as we don't stay in touch and live in different parts of the country!

[KAOlmsted]

Gotcha.