First Love

First Love

The shadows on my wall

that were my haunting

have flickered and died,

been quelled

by the gentling of your heart.

The screams in my skull

that tortured my mind

have fallen silent,

calmed by the

soothing of your sweet kiss.

The devils that tore at my soul

till my sanity drained

have been cast out,

dispersed by

the breeze of your soft breaths.

So here I lay in rebirth

open and naked in my deliverance

knowing for the first time

ever in my life,

I really understand

the meaning of love.

 

19/04/13

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

This is just beautiful, John...I really like this one. Thanks so much for sharing it with us.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Kimmer you are very kind

[KAOlmsted]

Yes I am xD

Just kidding ;-) My pleasure, of course.

[Debra Wedin]

Oh man...I'm seriously feeling this!!!
Talk about exactly how it feels to fall in love.
You have captured, feelings..most would
unable to say!!
Nice...very nice!!!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Debra, I am such a lucky man!

[Debra Wedin]

Your welcome..and I'm happy for you!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

an accomplished piece her John, moving, well done

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sheema you are very kind.

[Keith LaFountaine]

Excellent work John. I think this is something everyone can relate to, especially me. My favorite thing about your poems is you have such versatility with your subjects. You can switch from a depressing topic to something like this, and do both phenomenally. That's a trait I admire greatly.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Keith for such a supportive review.

[Frieda P]

If we're really lucky we can find that person that elevates us to be the best we can be, apparently you've had the privilege John. Lovely.

[Frieda P]

I saw that...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Frieda, indeed it does but all too often, especially if we are self doubters we acquiesce and end up trying to fit ourselves to someone who is not right for us and we are then devastated when it falls apart. it is not until we find that soul mate that we really feel that buzz. Thanks Frieda.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Made too many typos so started again!

[Leslie Philibert]

another good one from John, like very much the thought provoking last lines..

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Leslie.

[Junert]

Oh dear love.

[Rhianne Ney]

The last line makes me lost in thought so forgive me if I blabber here and say something that I doubt would make sense at all. Well, since I don't know what love really means maybe I was kinda confused still...
But nonetheless the last line really hits me... and I was asking myself if I'll feel that someday or if I'll question myself with the same question someday...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Sweet girl I have thought on at least five occassions I had found love until I met someone who valued and loved me and not just I loved and valued them!

[Rhianne Ney]

I see, that's a good thing then

[TheGreenestLeaf]

I can feel the pain and see it melting away as the relationship evolves, until finally... sweet oblivion. Simply beautiful.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Aly.

[quinfinn]

what a gorgeous painting of the beauty of what love was truly meant to feel like. this is , in a word, exquisite!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you, thank you Quin, thank you so much!