Love's Effect

Love’s Effect

Butterflies in droves

invade my belly

when we speak of love.

They flutter and dance

in the warm spring sunshine

of our union

and leave me breathless

with a true desire

to share with you

a heart and soul

filled with your majesty.

A burning thing

that spreads its heat

until I stand erect

in your honour

and can do no other

than serve your hunger well.

And when these delicate

and beautiful creatures settle

upon the organ

that is this fertile stamen,

to sup upon our sweet nectar,

I fall in soft circles

of star filled hope

as my moon collides

with your sweet

and perfect Venus.

 

17/04/13

Reviews

[Rhianne Ney]

The piece describes love perfectly. But I'm just saying that to tell you that it's amazing because literally I haven't felt such thing (:
So, still great piece~

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Rhianne. You will if you believe in yourself and look carefully.

[Rhianne Ney]

Sure then~

[BlackRose]

Another AMAZING piece. Your another one that writes and expresses very well. Wonderful use of these words. Looove is in certainly in the air... ;o)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks for such a lovely review BR

[BlackRose]

Your very welcome. My pleasure. I know good writes when I see them.

[Jake Botha]

John,

like how the poem progresses from that first fluttering of love, to a more erotic (though very well veiled) tone in the end. The natural progression of how love evolves over time.

Great piece.

Jake

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Jake

[SHEEMA HUQ]

very powerful writing

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sheema

[s y e]

Woah dude! This was great, very, very good work! As always, alot of emotion

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Well thank you kindly mam!

[s y e]

Welcome, your highness

[Junert]

Awwww. Hot.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Junert

[Leslie Philibert]

and Victoria is right, delightful.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Leslie, you are always so very generous.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Oh how lovely this is. Enjoyed this a lot, all of it. I can't choose a favorite part(s) in this poem, it's all so fitting like a story of emotion/Love.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Victoria, you are most kind

[Emerald Seas]

Wow, John - very in touch with emotion here. Vivid thoughts and feelings of love work through to captivate your reader's heart. Nicely penned!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you QSS. Glad you enjoyed it.