Permission to Land

Permission to Land

As storm clouds gather

around your life

I am forced to circle the skies,

waiting.

From my clear vantage

I see the landing strip,

the tower

and the terminal building

through drifting mists.

Still I keep this dreary watch,

this holding pattern.

I am so close to you

and yet so far,

but here

I must remain,

until you give me

permission to land.

 

25/03/13

Reviews

[Angi]

Ahhh, he loves someone who is unavailable to him for some reason. So he waits. ...and waits. How long can he circle before he crashes and burns? Angi~

[Mark]

OH yes... clouds and storms and waiting to land. Been there LOL Great words John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you agaIn Mark. I guess our words have many meanings. In this case it is being in love with a woman who is still in the death throws of her marriage.

[Mark]

yah... mine wasn't married, but in a relationship going south.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

another parallel! Spooky.

[KAOlmsted]

Holy cats, John...if The Brit could write, this is what he'd produce, without question ;-) I think he feels like this pretty much all the damn time, but I keep telling him, hey, that's life when you love a depressed, self-loathing narcissist with cyclothymic disorder xD Seriously, though...this is really great. Thanks so much for sharing this with us.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I like the subtle flow of this poem, good work indeed

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Sheema, sorry to have been so active but I took leave for two weeks with the intention of getting on with outdoor jobs only to be snowed in

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Successful relationship only achieved through mutual trust and this piece is an example. love the word play. It is a stunning write Mr. John keep kicking!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you kind Marc

[A. H. Pinley]

What do I hear? The control tower can see your aircraft is in trouble with daily events, but unwilling to step in to guide you to the flight strip till you ask for assistance. Sacrifice your pride ask for help.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Its complicated but just a case of waiting. Thanks AHP

[Claire Twinn]

Stunning write John, a moving analogy that portrays the emotions felt here perfectly.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Claire. Life can be complicated can it not?

[Leslie Philibert]

Chris is right, a strong and original image, and a excellent poem

[Junert]

I like the title. And how it ends the poem.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Junert