Despair

Despair

My spirit has become black as night,

dark inks pen my soul

with tattoos of the apocalypse.

Demons rising as devil’s spawn,

charcoal wings spread

across a bleeding sky

to shield my eyes from hope

and drive me to despair.

And if there is a God,

I don’t believe in him

for he has forsaken

every Christian vow

that was ever made.

 

23/03/13

Reviews

[James E. Peterson]

tale of someone forsaken by a god he/she never knew. delicious read john. keep it up.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Kiran you are most kind

[AYVID N]

Reading this I can see the ghouls circling me. Very depressing picture created here very effectively. Your imagination working wonders here John! I am totally identified with this pain for now! Thanks for sending me this worthy read!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Divya, you are very kind and I am happy you enjoy some of my writing.

[AYVID N]

Thanks John! Yes, enjoy I do, always! :)

[Allan W]

Yes.....!!! Ilove this. Reminded me of an early poem of mine (but not as good) about visions of the dark horsemen of the apocalypse riding across the sky.

I love this.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thank yous Allan for such a lovely review.

[KAOlmsted]

Somebody needs a hug ;-)

I think Despair is too tame a word to describe this incredibly dark and desolate write. Really well captured, those feelings...excellent work, John...no surprise there ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Kimmer. What a difference a day makes to us poets eh!?

[KAOlmsted]

Ain't that the truth...Always my pleasure, John.

[A. H. Pinley]

You can lose faith in many things when times seem dark. It's easy to do. It's easy to think that you have been left for dead when the walls around you are crumbling and the sun doesn't look like it will rise again. It's in those struggling times we grow.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Very true AHP, very true. Many thanks.

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, I often ( as a agnostic ) put my foot in it with religious poetry, as I hate being preached at - religion is fine, religious poetry too, as long as it is a statement of personal faith and not a command to think the same. And religion has produced some of the best poets, Donne, Herbert, Milton...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Leslie, Many thanks. I guess I was not making a religious statement rather portraying how many lose faith at their lowest times. Personally I think if you need religion then it is for the individual to decide. I see poeple for whom it does good as they have little faith in themselves or their fellow man. But much harm has come from ideology and religion used to fuel the collective fears of a people. Oops here endeth the first lesson!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Very deep and dark story progression. to include God in this piece by asking, you drive the story from dark to light. Even there is a confusing faith but still you recognized the existence of God that makes this story great.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Marc it was an angry rant at tragedy.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yea I can feel it. Cheers Bro.!

[Junert]

God never forsake. He does everything in His good time.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It's a poem about despair and many people who have truly felt it find their faith badly shaken. Besides it's a poem not a sermon dear Junert.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oh and he certainly is taking his time.....................

[Junert]

Lol, I know it's a poem. But words written is what our heart says.