Hurt

Hurt

In this harsh winter

my feelings fade; day to dusk.

Poverty of thought

until my pores are clogged

with the heart blocking cholesterol

of misery.

Frozen salt waters expand

till I am an iceberg, floating

in a cold, vast, ocean of mistrust.

My skin pulled tight

to shut out the chill;

like an overcoat

wrapped around my hollow faith

to stop the pain and hurt

of once warm memories.

And now I fear the thaw,

for although it brings life,

and the joys of spring,

I know that I will suffer

the agonies

 as my circulation returns

and my soul awakens.

 

14/03/13

Reviews

[MAC]

This is a brilliant poem that has the feel of a classic. The more I read you the more I wonder why you are here online and not in a book sitting on a professor's desk as he discuss it with his class.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Mark, I am so humbled to have such a wonderful review. I only write for pleasure and your enjoyment of my writing gives me such a feeling of honour and satisfaction. Thank you so much!

[MAC]

The feelings are mutual John. It is humbling to read you and almost impossible to review you because you are truly that amazing.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Mark why is your work not familiar to me?

[Leslie Philibert]

Like the physical use of emotions - well crafted poem.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Leslie

[SHEEMA HUQ]

this is very moiving I felt, nicely engineered with clever use of vocabularly, well done

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sheema

[SHEEMA HUQ]

yo, it's a gooden

[Pete Langley]

There is a realism to this piece - a pragmatism and recognition that despite the bleak shutting down - the invertion of feeling - there will be an emergence. I like this piece a lot. P.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Pete for such a considered review.

[ms. barrie]

John, I have to say this this is so eloquently poignant, amazingly well structured poem! Your words captured the imagery of being hurt to the point of being, frozen, almost numb from the pain. Brilliant use of rhyme and meter. A very heart-felt write, exquisitely penned. Thanks for sharing :) - 100 to 100!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Barrie, very pleased you enjoyed this piece as it is written from having felt these emotions. Your kind comments are very much appreciated.

[ms. barrie]

You are very welcome, John. It is an amazing poem :) and you expressed dealing
with those emotions, as I stated before, eloquently. Pen on!

[Ashly Christen]

OMG! I JUST LOVE YOUR WRITING, I COULD RE READ THIS A MILLION TIMES OVER, VERY WELL DONE I LOVE IT!!!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ashley I am so touched. I blushed reading this. I write mainly in feelings or memories of feelings or on subjects I feel strongly about. Now and Again I write a fun piece. So to have someone enjoy my scribbles is so lovely. Thank you for such a beautiful accolade.

[Ashly Christen]

i very much enjoy them :D your so welcome

[Leigh]

This is spring like and I love the way you describe your being using a multi sensory approach. This piece has a great twist to it, as you transform the mood and feelings. A great write, a touch above infact, one of your best for me

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Really wow Leigh I am humbled. Many thanks.