Hurt

Hurt

In this harsh winter

my feelings fade; day to dusk.

Poverty of thought

until my pores are clogged

with the heart blocking cholesterol

of misery.

Frozen salt waters expand

till I am an iceberg, floating

in a cold, vast, ocean of mistrust.

My skin pulled tight

to shut out the chill;

like an overcoat

wrapped around my hollow faith

to stop the pain and hurt

of once warm memories.

And now I fear the thaw,

for although it brings life,

and the joys of spring,

I know that I will suffer

the agonies

 as my circulation returns

and my soul awakens.

 

14/03/13

Reviews

[James E. Peterson]

pure poetic genius, you're talented John

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You indulge me Kiran and I an grateful. Many thanks!

[KAOlmsted]

Well, there's good cholesterol and there's bad cholesterol...I'm just amazed somebody actually used that word in poetic verse...about damn time, too ;-) I love the sentiment in this piece, shaking off the old wariness, giving in to trust, those needle and pin pains as the circulation returns. Powerful stuff, John. I love it...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Kimmer for a lovely review.

[KAOlmsted]

The pleasure is all mine ;-)

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

Oh this is amazing..such a richness of expression!
and depth of thoughts in combination here is a really magical piece!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow, Many thanks Ayaz for such a wonderful accolade.

[astronaut]

I LOVE this.Good job. :-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Tadyr

[Allan W]

Not only the title of one of the best songs ever written - but one of your best poems I have read John. Excellent. Loved it!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow! Thank you Allan.

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Your lines runs so smoothly throughout the page, my dear friend.
"I know that I will suffer

the agonies

as my circulation returns

and my soul awakens." Soooo deep :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Cord

[Emerald Seas]

Very well done! The last four lines cinch up the thoughts quite nicely. Love is such a paradox of pleasure, fears, pain, and joy. Hopefully, we have more shared moments in the positive than in the negative.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks QSS.

[quinfinn]

your writes always wax metaphorical so fluidly, like this was an intended language. this is superb writing, dear poet!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Quin

[quinfinn]

welcome!

[AYVID N]

I know that return to reality is dis comfortable

"My skin pulled tight
to shut out the chill;
like an overcoat
wrapped around my hollow faith
to stop the pain and hurt - but the coat has to come off sumtime and we have to rise the challenge,Thanks!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

De lends dear Divya what one is wearing beneath the. Overcoat. Stockings and suspenders will do!

[AYVID N]

:)

[Frieda P]

This certainly has your name written all over it, elegant in it's delivery, and stirring emotions on a personal level for everyone.

Frozen salt waters expand
till I am an iceberg, floating
in a cold, vast, ocean of mistrust.

Stunning, as always....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Frieda