Unrequited Love

Unrequited Love

Between a rock and hard place,

is where I exist,

trapped in the currents

swept up in love’s bliss.

And as I tread water

I sink as I swim,

deep in the mire

of the struggle within.

But I cannot turn back,

I am gone far too long,

there's no moving forward,

I was never that strong.

So I can't go on hoping

that one day you will

fill all of the dreams

as I would fulfil.

And it makes no sense,

no sense at all,

that I struggle to reach you,

and you won’t break my fall.

So when will I start listening,

when will I hear?

that you really don’t want me,

when will it be clear?

Between a rock and a hard place

is the place where I lay,

between a rock and a hard place

is where I can’t stay.

 

08/03/13

Reviews

[Leslie Philibert]

A well written look at a subject we all know and understand.

[Katherine]

Yea! A departure from the norm! ;)
Thank-you for some misery!!
I liked this.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hey I have writen my share of misery thank you! Take a look at my 'back catalogue' lol

[quinfinn]

this writing style is somewhat of a departure for you but i liked this write. this theme sounds vaguely familiar...i know all about being between a rock and several other rocks under a very hard place...nice job.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Quin. Was just a result of reviewing a piece earlier today and gertting carried away (by the men in white coats) got a day off from work today and another on Monday!

[quinfinn]

loooooooooooong weekend! this calls for a celebration

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It certainly does. Going over to Karina's later lol

[Frieda P]

Not your typical, love and bliss and all that jazz write John...it's full of disappointment and the frustration is palpable....good write, just kind of depressing, from you anyway..I guess I'm not the only one that can do a dark write.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not bourne from recent experience though just stolen the theme from a review I did earlier lol

[Frieda P]

Good to hear...well for you anyway, poor Karina! ;-)

[Ayvid N]

"But I cannot turn back,
I am gone far too long,
there's no moving forward,
I was never that strong." - Its sad when someone is left with no options.

"I sink as I swim,
deep in the mire
of the struggle within" - captures the dilemma perfectly.

You have created a great picture of a brow-beaten lover caught in the vortex of one-way love. The reader feels the pain and bafflement between the lines.

A great write John!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Divya, Not my usual style. Stimulated by reviewing someone elses writing.

[Ayvid N]

You are welcome John. I liked the rhyming a lot too.