Judgement Day

Judgement Day

His mind moved

as devils sinned,

all tortured f*****s

in a witches brew

of stagnant faeces.

A thick broth

of errant nature

in which the mire

of man had sunk.

Spells cast upon an earth

so broken and downtrodden

that it must end

all hope of Eden’s promises.

All human life extinct,

snuffed out

like a candle in the winds

of savage fate.

Broken hearts; tormented souls

cast adrift upon ethereal

swirling, misty clouds,

where gods do battle

over our remains.

23/01/13

Reviews

[Junert]

Our remains indeed.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Remains of the day lol

[KAOlmsted]

"Where gods do battle over our remains" makes me feel so insignificant, as though I am merely collateral damage in the Master Plan. Great work here, John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Kimmer and you insignificant? him up there takes your instructions!

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure, John...and thank you ;-)

[spiritwind]

This is so dark
I could believe these lines originated
in the scene where three witches brewed
or, more likely, originated in the soul of a demon
or a warlock
who hated the creation of man
and would celebrate its demise.
Like how you handled this

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Fun illy enough I did have a thought of witches when I was writing. Thank you SW

[LA Lorena]

Simon lives. ;)

This is dark, bleak, tragic, and not my cup of tea, although I can appreciate the skill and craft you have put into it. In that light, it is brilliant. I prefer your romantic side John, but that is my personal preference only.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yeah but It is one piece that did not spring from feelings but just words and thoughts in my head

[Claire Twinn]

In a black mood today by any chance? A grim glimpse of the future here, better enjoy ourselves before this happens!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No not in a black mood just words that sprang from phrases in my head Claire. It was nice to have lunch with you guys

[Leslie Philibert]

I have read a lot of John`s poetry - another good one here.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Leslie

[Frieda P]

As if I wasn't depressed enough already! lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yeah but if you believe this piece it will all be over sometime for us all. So get writing lol

[AYVID N]

God's pet project gone kaput!
This poem reminded me of The 'Revelations'
The swamp of stagnant feaces is just too deep and the cleanup is inevitable.

Awesome comment, stark imagery.

You are so religious John! :)
And I loved this write.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so very much Divya. Another just write piece when my mind was idling lol

[AYVID N]

"An idle mind is worth two in the bush."
--Anonymous :)

You are welcome John!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha! Ha! Love the originality Divya

[AYVID N]

:)