And So Farewell

And So Farewell

You take my simple words

and bend them

in distorted hates.

Your eloquent prose

hides well your anal nature,

buried in the grave

of your own disaster;

so deep.

You proclaim

loves you dare not keep,

from behind the dark veil

of anonymity.

So many early morning hours

spent in cathartic rhyme,

simply a ruse

to protect the you

you hold behind that wall,

so distant from the world that hurts,

no one will ever look into your eyes

nor feel the warmth

of such pale skin.

 

06/11/12

Reviews

[Echezonachukwu Nduka]

There seems to be something wrong with a character here.It portarys a feeling of hatred and rejection to an extent.I like the tone of the poem.Great write!

[Lily Mae]

I know this person lol.. Excellent write and very powerful..xo

[John Alexander McFadyen]

thank you Lily Mae. You may well know them lol

[Aaron]

"no one will ever look into your eyes
nor feel the warmth
of such pale skin."

Ouch..

This is a very powerful poem.
Thanks for sharing!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Aaron.

[Leigh]

I'm not sure I quite got it 100%, this seems to be a very personal account, that is flavoured with twisted bitterness, I'd like to know a bit more - great to read

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No the situation was confusing to me too so perhaps this is reflected in this rather emotional piece. Thank you Leigh.

[Leigh]

yes perhaps, these thing are confusing

[Leslie Philibert]

A good poem, that impresses with real bitterness and hardness, like the use of anal nature, and the very threatening last lines - I believe you.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes maybe too harsh me thinks! Thank you.

[Violet Dreams...]

gr8 job

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you VD

[Hamza]

I had to read it twice to formulate the idea..
But the lines that still are striking me :
"You take my simple words
and bend them
in distorted hates.
"

How intelligently done ...
Amazing writing ..

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Hamza, you are very kind.

[Hamza]

:)

[Nicky Sarti]

I didn't get what Claire got... (that's alright, right?)
I get that she's too afraid of coming out and being seen as it were.
But, ah; what do I know?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes you both have it right. It's about how you handle it and treat the other person. Thanks Nicki

[Nicky Sarti]

Anytime, always meant x

[Claire Twinn]

Oooh, such pain and hatred! She sounds vile (I hope it's not me too!! Joke!). You're a genius at conveying emotion John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Just in response to a something posted by a woman scorned. Thanks Claire