That I Would Die For

 

That I Would Die For

Let me cleanse you of your pain,

like a gentle summer shower

that leaves the air refreshed.

Let me wash away your guilt,

like soap upon your skin

and make you silky soft.

Let me hold you and adore you

with every ounce of love

that I have in my heart.

For every moment in your life

I grow stronger,

and I know my soul belongs to you.

So let us collide like planets

so our universe explodes

and erupts with joy.

Let me kiss you deep

and in the meeting of our mouths

feel the passion of truth.

Give yourself faithfully to me

in that sweet, sweet surrender

that I would die for.

 

 

5^th August 2010

Reviews

[dunnia]

such soothing words

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Dunnia. I did try to use it to sooth.

[dunnia]

your welcome

[Kuhr Gred]

wow.. really cool.. i like it.. thanks for sharing
- Kuhr Gred

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you kind lady.

[KarinaT]

Why am I reading this on a self publishing website?? Why is this not in a worth-every-penny hardback to be kept in the "good end" of the book shelf with books that you treasure and pass on to your kids as heirlooms of important and classic writing. I read ALOT! And your stuff gets to me. I want to sit in my reading chair with the feel of a good quality binding in my hands and read your work. You are simply brilliant. Thank you.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Karina, I am assuming you are one and the same who has joined the East Midlands Writing Group? If so hope you can make the next meetup. Many, many thanks for your generosity!!!

[KarinaT]

I'm not generous in this instance. Just honest :-) and yes it's the same Karina that will join the East Midlands writing group on your next meeting.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Fantastic. I see you have posted more on the site but I find the site stilted so spend most of my time on here. Some fantastic writers here. And hey you CAN write. Hope you will post your work here as it is easier to read. Speak soon. John

[KarinaT]

I write because I can't help it. It sharing it I find hard. Have to learn to open up more I guess. Work on my shyness. It is all so compulsive don't you find?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Karina check your messages. Must abed now as I am bushed. Speak soon
John

[Nicky Sarti]

What everyone else has said.
Brilliant as always.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Nicki

[Mark]

Great write John, heart felt, and honest.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Mark.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

very nicely worded

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sheema I feel very humbled by your lovely reviews.

[Lily Mae]

I like the thought of someone wanting to cleanse away the pain.. Some times we get so caught up in "us" we forget what the other goes through..

Wonderfully penned passion..x

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Lily Mae. I guess we all have our different sides and I think the secret is in the bargain that says we are in this together and I will give deep love and care but I need it back too?

[A love for poetry]

A very steady and continuous rhythm; to this sounds like a very faithful women; a type of women with pleasant womanly values.

"Let me kiss you deep
and in the meeting of our mouths
feel the passion of truth."

This part was a bit upbeat from the rest of the poem I thought; for me it started off and continued to level out on a caring and loving realm until it went up a notch and got... "tangy" that's just my initial feeling, in the first read through.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Isaac. I really do pay attention and respect those who read my work with a forensic eye.

[A love for poetry]

Ah yes, let me clarify the "tangy" comment; I used it to mean, a kiss with the tongue. Which I would think in a slight way (subject to my own notions) would lessen the pleasantness of the (soft silky) feelings of the poem.

Perhaps I should make a habit of reading through thrice before reviewing a poem.

[spiritwind]

Let me cleanse you of your pain,
like a gentle summer shower
that leaves the air refreshed.
Let me wash away your guilt,
like soap upon your skin
and make you silky soft.

Let me hold you and adore you
with every ounce of love
that I have in my heart.

These words make a woman purr. Lord Byron would have loved to have penned this poem but that was not to be. Sad for him~~~ good for you.

Enjoyed your planets colliding and exploding ~~ very well written and delicately passionate. Love it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Spiritwind just letting me out AGAIN!

[That_Girl]

This is absolutely lovely. Your words are so soft and sweet... bravo.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Emo for reading.