Helen

Helen

She stood before

the burning walls

of Troy

and wept at

her own destructive power.

How could a single

female heart and face unleash

such wanton destruction.

But in her

bitter tear

was only hollow

sadness

as she revelled

in her complete

and utter

captivation of man.

 

27/08/12

Reviews

[Mark]

Complicated... :) Great write IMO

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yeah women are are they not? Lol Thanks Mark

[Nicky Sarti]

Helen's gonna get it...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Nah the women generally have their cake and eat it!

[Nicky Sarti]

I wish they did in my world mate!
We so need to swap if that's the case!!

[Alexandria Reece]

As a male it is brilliant you could come to such great understanding of the female mind. I love how you've (excuse the pun) captured Helen here. I think if I were in her situation I would feel this exact mix of emotions, many women have been here on a smaller scale and I am sure will relate to this work as I do. I adore the simplicity of delivery, because it de-tangles the thought process while trying to digest the complexity of the emotional board you've set up here. Great job, really.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow Alexandria, That is an accolade I am humbled and thank you for such a kind review.

[Alexandria Reece]

Any time, sir!

[New Dawn]

Wow - I thought Helen was abducted - yet here we find she was actually playing men off against each other! Interesting write .... although helen might have disagreed with your portrayal :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Most women would deny their part in the destruction of man my dear lady. Helen was none too dissaponted to be a prize as legend tells!

[I Shred This Cabbage]

ah yes she is the sun that held a tyrant's gaze...

really enjoyed this...

only thing i would say is if in the tear is only hollow sadness, surely it wouldn't be bitter?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It was sardonic poetic licence I used!

[I Shred This Cabbage]

ha! then if you have obtained such a licence, please do not let my words trouble you any more! ;P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Do I detect the use of wit?

[I Shred This Cabbage]

it's the poet's curse, is it not? ;P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A curse or spell? so long as we refrain from sarcasm we will reign as masters in the universe of internet, intellectual invasion!

[I Shred This Cabbage]

perhaps a curseful spell that will allow us, albiet briefly, to quicken life admist times of sorrow.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

And in the quicken I slow the pace of my surrender till I fall beneath the hooves of the appocalypse.

[Lily Mae]

You amaze me on how powerful your shorter writes can be.. You take it and make it and work it until bam.. :) excellent protraile of Helen..xo

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Lily Mae, Thank you it pleases me that you like my work. I have to write in short burst as my mind is on the next thing already lol. Same at work always trying to be creative.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Wonderfully written.........

[FJ Davis]

While I never made her acquaintance--and I'm old enough to have done so--this seems a likely portrait.
She was a woman, wasn't she?
Creative write, John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Frank. I guess I kidnapped her as a metaphor though wasn't really dissing Helen!

[Emily B]

oh, oh . . .

[John Alexander McFadyen]

???

[Emily B]

sorry . . . it was a compliment

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An unexplained exclamation as if something else was coming. Thought I would be in for it for having a pop! lol

[Emily B]

i have strange ways sometimes, i bear watching