Lurein Ley

Lurein Ley

He did not return,

despite her beauty,

for he had betrayal

on his mind.

So she sat atop

one hundred metres high

combing her fine locks

of gold and moonbeams,

and waited.

She stared out to sea

and saw all the dreams

that love had created

in woven threads,

tricks of emotion.

The cold gripped her soul,

an empty hunger,

a confusion of tears and rages,

as she stared in hollow glances

at the cold waters

of the Rhine that waited

to consume her heart.

So she took a step

and dived head first

into deaths salvation,

her purgatory etched

into the pain

of her dying eyes.

Now she lingers

in revenge to seek,

the souls of sailors

that she may wreck

upon the rocks of time;

with her beauty and

a whispered melody

from her

murmuring rock.

 

25/08/12

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

superb flow, with such a moving emotional content, good write

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Sheema.

[Irene]

of course it is brilliant. you wrote it. good write :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Irene many thanks, and I blush.

[Nicky Sarti]

As always, brilliant piece.
Lust filled as usual?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Gosh Nicki I fear you do me a diservice. I write many poems that are about love, hurt and some that are erotic but I write lots with other themes and this is simply based on the legend of the Rhine Siren.Not much lust in suicide!

[Geraldine]

I so loved the story in there, it's sad and depressing yet a very brilliant write. I liked it. :))

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Geraldine thanks for reading. It is a sad legend.

[spiritwind]

The lady didn't take rejection very well, did she? And so is born the legend of the siren and her song luring foolhardy sailors to their death. "a whispered melody
from her
murmuring rock"
That is so lovely... befitting the irresistible death of the sea.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No I guess the poor lass didnt take rejection well at all. Thanks for reading

[Lisa Ring]

I love this one, John. A tragic story so beautifully written, with no superfluous words. Excellent.

[That_Girl]

Dark and eerie... I love it! Brilliant!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much!

[Lily Mae]

So vivid I could see her and feel it..xo

[Falling Leaf.]

Half mystery, half honesty. An exquisite story.