Butterfly Sting

Butterfly Sting

Pain!

So much agony

and wrenching of the heart.

So much acrimony

in endings.

Such a waste of creation,

of building love and expectation;

naïve or not.

Such a rapid collapse

of inflated fanciful fantasies

comes brick hard;

leaves a cold and empty shock,

an angry disbelief.

After all,

none of us ever expects

a butterfly sting.

 

17/08/12

Author's Note

Expect the unexpected.

Reviews

[X]

Wow. Once again this poem speaks to me so well and it's amazing how well you are able to capture almost perfectly the highs and lows of love and the effects it has on us. I have felt this butterfly sting twice now- and don't plan on experiencing it again. Another one to add to my favorites. Thanks for this.

X

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I for one hope you never feel it again X. Many thank yous!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

This one really made me think twice...such clever metaphore, well done John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you, thank you Sheema

[Leslie Philibert]

Nice write with unexpected associations, fine.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You Leslie have staying power my friend!

[LA Lorena]

this was very good John, and very unexpected. the sting, that is. I expected good. You always deliver!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Glad to be of service my lady.

[AYVID N]

A very very poignant comment on break-ups. You could not have worded it better! One thing...
Male butterflies sting equally bad.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Sorry didn't mean to be sexist. I accept your point and was only writing from my emotion. Thanks Divya.

[AYVID N]

Oh no! Thats ok! I was just commiserating there! Not pointing out anything :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ok but I realise man can hurt a woman just as much.

[Frieda P]

OK maybe it's that spiked eggnog but I could have sworn this about an erection gone terribly wrong!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha! definately somthing in your drink my lady lol

[Frieda P]

;-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, yes, this is such a good analogy...the idea of what we expect from a butterfly...peaceful creature, beautiful, softly landing...endearing itself to us...just like a lover...and then bam..

we end up with a hornet...get stung...and wonder..geez, did that thing come from a cocoon?

what a wonderfully, thoughtful write.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thank Jacob

[quinfinn]

oh, the wording is brilliant! "butterfly sting"....yours is a traveled heart, my friend. we have that in common, and you have touched upon my life experience with this powerful write.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many, many thanks Quin plesased you enjoyed it.

[spiritwind]

Those last three words certainly stop the reader in his tracks. Love an ending that doesn't whimper but gives total BANG for its buck.
But let's not forget lines like this: "Such a rapid collapse

of inflated fanciful fantasies

comes brick hard;"

Excellent as is usual. Sorry, I have grown to expect excellence from your poems in all or part. So far I have not been disappointed.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you, thank you Spiritwind

[Phillitup]

Quite the oxymoron and yet you out did yourself. This was eloquent and well-written. I applaud you on your piece!
Best regards,
Dell

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Dell