Glass

Glass

In this wreckage lies a man.

His eyes see wonder and hope,

his heart beats strong still;

but his throat is full of glass.

Sharp, angry, jagged splinters

that slice and pierce

at each tortured breath

and with each pitiful swallow.

These fragments of memory

are lodged fast,

lacerating and scarring,

a deep carved weal of pain.

And he lives this agony

each and every moment.

Every woman who has fed him

has left him this agony.

His reward for vows and promises

taken and broken by them;

the mask for their guilt.

 

 

8^th June 2010

Reviews

[amarlaksh]

A great idea presented with the finest detail. wonderful!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Amar

[Kajal Gulabani]

Stupendous I must say.. Full of indignation yet hopeful... Loved it

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow, many thanks Kajal

[SHEEMA HUQ]

what is quite amazing about this poem is that it could be read really fast and understood on quite a meaningful level yet it could also be read through quite slowly and followed through as a quality classic.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow I am flattered.Many thanks

[Leslie Philibert]

very fine central metaphor, visual and intelligent.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Leslie, I am so grateful you have reviewed so much of my writing in a sitting. I feel indulged.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

we all bear the scars of past relationships I think the trick is to not blame your new interest for something they have not done. Well written John

[John Alexander McFadyen]

True Neva and never globalise pain. I have found someone after years of searching. The love of my life went off with someone else and I have always felt those who lose someone are more fortunate for they can mourne the loss and know no one else holds their loved one. I havew spent decades trying to recover knowing she was with someone else.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

She did me a favour recently by doing the same to the guy she left me for lol

[LA Lorena]

I can feel the pain here John. I'm glad you no longer chew glass, but have found a dish more pleasing to the palate and psyche!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi stranger!!!! hope you are good. I know I have found a most succulent dish. Glad you liked it

[LA Lorena]

Hi John! I've been insanely busy. Hugs to you and Karina both!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Warm thank yous x

[AYVID N]

I hate those women for how they hurt this wonderful vulnerable man.
oH MY gOD......... the intensity of the pain can be felt so deeply_
'"his throat is full of glass.
Sharp, angry, jagged splinters
that slice and pierce
at each tortured breath"
This is just so sad. 100/100 for the depiction of the Pain.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Most of my writing is from experiencing the emotion and this is how I have felt. Sorry for the deluge of work but someone accused me yesterday of only writing erotica!

[AYVID N]

I enjoyed reading every poem John and it left no doubt you are equally effective with stuff other than erotica. Your depiction of pain is so real so palpable and it could only come from within someone who has really felt it all. But...please..No one must discourage your writing erotica! You are just too good with that and I am looking forward to a lot more of that :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I feel very humbled by your kind support. I will write more of everything. Been very busy this past week so a dry spell-excuse the pun lol

[Frieda P]

No words. Slow vitreous death.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oops. Thanks Frieda

[quinfinn]

a man broken by woman bleeds eternal...you are preaching to the choir here....i, for one, am weary of swallowing shards of broken dreams...but i love how you have expressed this malady.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I guess many of us share similar disappointments and before the gals kick off I am sure many of them have also been let down too. Thanks Quin.

[KarinaT]

Those days are over ..... Xxxx

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I know xxx

[LA Lorena]

awww. just had to stick my head in here and say this was so nice to see. I love you two together!

[KarinaT]

That's really nice LA. Hope you have a wonderful Christmas and I look forward to having time to read more of your work. You rock xxx