God Particle

God Particle

Collide.

Smash to destruction

all that is created;

to be born again.

To rise with majesty,

and triumph over God

with your science.

If only Darwin had known

such liberation,

the freedom to believe.

Prove your point

that earthly creatures of dust

have set and formed

from cellestial treacle.

Have ruled this speck

in the void of man’s univesrse,

a place created by man

simply because he believes it so.

And yet his lack of self belief,

his grave and earnest doubt,

drives him to seek,

if not his God,

his particle of faith.

 

25/01/12

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes the theme of some of your writing for sure. Beautifully distilled in this piece. I haven't a thing more to say but bravo.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you KLG for such a kind review.

[Gerald Parker]

Not a teacher now, not a case of once a teacher always a teacher, just an unpaid poet.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oh to be retired and simply write!

[Gerald Parker]

If only one could. And read.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow, beautiful piece love it! the last line is stunning and the rest are great! Thanks for sharing Mr. John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Marc

[Gerald Parker]

Hi, I'm astounded by the enormous number of poems you have written! Some very dark. How are today? I'm struggling with Mr Vaillancourt - I feel I should know who he is, but don't.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Gerald, mr V. Is on the site. I had two weeks leave and snow in March so bang went my gardening jobs I had lined up. The dark poems are all from digging in memories rather than a reflection of my mood so I am fine thanks.

[Gerald Parker]

I've read it - but who is/was Mr Villaincourt? Gap in my knowledge.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

He is a writer on the site whose comments often border on rude and insulting and non constructive.

[Gerald Parker]

Oh, I thought he was some famous French philosopher I should have heard about. Oh dear, I've been rude and non-constructive, too.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

For a teacher That's not good! Maybe I will have to pen a Parker piece lol!

[Dalia]

The last lines were perfect, the theme of faith is not an easy one to write about but you've handled it perfectly.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you for such kind comments Dalia

[Emerald Seas]

Good conclusion, ending really wraps this up tightly. Nice penning :)

[creativequill]

i really like the last three lines, nicely written piece :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you CQ

[creativequill]

of course :)

[Leigh]

Nicely put, there's no harm in looking for whatever might be there

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I agree but like Darwin I believe science has it. Thanks Leigh

[KAOlmsted]

I think you're trying to tell me something with these RRs *laugh* I seem to have missed a great number of your pieces...thank you for sharing this; I enjoyed it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No Leslie accused me of only writing erotica so I had to set the record straight Thanks Kimmer

[KAOlmsted]

I knew you were versatile, no record straightening needed for me :-D

[Leslie Philibert]

a great subject, well worked upon.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Leslie. Your site says little of you?