my star

my star

A Poem by PasDeChat

Up above so high you twinkle and shine

I stare and feel small just biding my time

Crickets chirp not knowing your there

Entranced by your beauty I sit and stare

I want to come to you, get away from it all

As you sparkle for me my problems seem small

Daylight breaks through, and hides you from sight

You are gone until another cloudless night

© 2009 PasDeChat


Author's Note

PasDeChat
I read a poem about stars... this is what it inspired from me!

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Beautiful, I love the imagery in this poem. I believe there is one typo though "Crickets chirp not knowing your there" your should be you're but everyone makes those mistakes but just thought I would let you know. It was a great write and a pleasure to read. Keep it up! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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A lovely write. Hopefully your star will keep shining...:).............

Posted 10 Years Ago


Beautiful poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Beautiful write....looking at the night sky makes me feel like I am at the same time so special, but so insignificant. kinda spiritual....
I liked the line "crickets chirp not knowing your there".....
and the idea that tomorrow is another night to behold....with a different perspective...:)

Posted 14 Years Ago


A dark starfilled sky is so beautiful..There are areas where they seem so much closer to the earth..nice write,lola nd God bless..Kathie

Posted 14 Years Ago


beautiful poem...it reminds me of a night i had :) thank you for awakening a beautiful memory :) keep on writing!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Beautiful, I love the imagery in this poem. I believe there is one typo though "Crickets chirp not knowing your there" your should be you're but everyone makes those mistakes but just thought I would let you know. It was a great write and a pleasure to read. Keep it up! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful, so short but inpirational!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awwwww :) This made me smile. Doesn't happen often these days.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is beautiful. It's so sincere. I myself love the stars and the moon and the sun.


Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A beautiful ode to the magical world above us, I know I feel so small in the gigantic scheme of the things around us. I have always seen a starlit sky as a wonderland better than anything if there are no city lights to hinder their brilliant display of light...you have made that clear in this piece.
Thank you~

Helen~

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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