Silence

 

Berate me for being

Yell a little more

My heart long forgotten like trash on the floor

 

Run as fast as I can

A marathon at least

The finish line you move just out of reach

 

My voice is silent

My mind screams out STOP IT

You spit out my name and I loath you for that

 

Efforts go unnoticed

My heart turned to frost

Respect  I miss most of what I have lost

Author's Note

.. after a nasty fight..

Reviews

[Bennett Logan]

I really like this poem and I can definitely relate to the sentiment. After a particularly nasty argument, you can wind up feeling pretty spent. You do a fantastic job of sketching out a picture of your state of mind after such a fight, and I really like the image of one of the participant's heart on the floor as thought it were trash. That's about how it feels after engaging yourself in such an emotional undertaking...

If i could suggest anything for this poem, it would be to get rid of the rhyme scheme altogether... Just write what you feel or see, focusing on your imagery, without making your brain search for rhymes. Again, this is a fantastic poem and I thank you for sharing it. Definitely keep up the good work!

[Valentine]

Self respect can fly out of the window when lovers fight..lola nd God bless..valentine

[Caydie Hall]

wow I completely felt this. rough. the rhythm that you develop is really great and the final line leaves me with a little shiver.
thanks for sharing!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

A real emotional piece. Beauty, sadness combined. Well done.

[Penslinger]

Love the flow
Its just dripping with emotion
I hope by writing some of that nastiness dissipated.
I have a hard time writing when I'm in a mood
Good work!