So Many But’s

and I's

I heard the turn

But he never returned

I heard the sigh

But never the hii

I saw the flare

But he never seemed to care

I knew then to wait

But then began to hate

I know not what to do anymore

But began by wasting nomore

Reviews

[Riddhi]

Great work....
Actually it was having rhyming words i am really happy otherwise today poets just write out of any rhyme or repetition which does not seem nice...at least for me...
So i really liked your poem....I just wished one thing that if the title would have been something elase instead of SO MANY BUTS the poem have been even more nice and interesting...
But the poem was very nice one which appealed to my soul....
actually that title one is just one of my thought...it my be that this title is more suitable...just a view...but overall very nice poem...
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing....
Take care
Riddhi

[Parvathy Nandan]

thank you so muj riddhi, :) i will keep on writing, and about the title,i will surely take in ur suggestion and will alter :)

[Riddhi]

Your most welcome....i wish if you would review my writings also......

[tanmay7551]

Unlike refusal here is complete ignorance. Good use of 'Buts'... And last line means breaking away...

I know not what to do anymore

But began by wasting nomore

[Parvathy Nandan]

Thank you for reading, and the review :)

[Solar]

'began by wasting nomore'

Good call!


re 'nomore' - I kinda like this as a neologism - you should patent the word.

It's a good description of the 'has-been' cad referred to in the poem.

[Parvathy Nandan]

haha....thankyou :)

[Solar]

Welcome you are, very.

[siddhi]

You are wonderful poet. All of us have something beautiful and great. You got your poetic soul.
just need to be little calm when writing

[Parvathy Nandan]

calm ?? I didn get you der !!

[siddhi]

calm mean little slow not finish in once

[M P Ramesh]

Parvathy,
Patience
perseverance
are told for writers

meditate over and over
you will catch hold of the
rhyme
suitable and only of yours


carry on pl...



M P Ramesh