Lost in her eyes

Her eyes are like crystal balls, mysterious and magical

As she gazes from behind her spectacles

I look at my reflection in her eyes which were beaming

and I saw visions of our future together in them

In those few seconds I lost my senses and couldn't tell how,

I was completely spellbound

Everything around me started dissapearing

and I find myself not able to reason clearly

I hear her breating near me, my heart beating fiercely

I was afraid I would start speaking weirdly

But then I saw her heels turned

and thus , I returned to the real world

Author's Note

Shalom, this is my first time posting here. I just want to point out that I often use phrases that rhyme together when I write. For example in this poem i used rhymes such as reason clearly, breathing near me, beating fiercely, speaking weirdly and heels turned, real world. I would love any feedbacks and criticism, thank you !

Reviews

[AliciaB]

Very cool! I like your use of the rhyming phrases - it unifies the poem and gives it a unique, interesting flow. That kind of thing can be difficult to master, so good for you for using that technique! I also really like the image of the crystal balls and how it is developed throughout the poem, from the speaker seeing his "reflection" and "visions of [the] future together" in the subject's eyes to him being "completely spellbound" and becoming monetarily detached from reality. This is a very interesting and unique expression of this experience. Nice work!

[Parthenius]

Thank you, I really appreciate it !!

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Well my friend . You desrcibe my experience so well. So I can read and feel my own love story. Words have meaning of love and desire. I like it cause poem tell story what I know on my own. Shalom

[Parthenius]

Thank you brother, I am glad that you feel this way about the poem. I wish to thank you also for reminding me that words carry power, peace.