Follow the Path

Follow the path of age and time, it will address;
Blissful ignorance, sentiment youth once possessed.

Follow leaders of power for we can't discern,
Greed--arrogance, authority often do churn.

Follow large masses, amongst the crowded we'll stand;
Misguided off course, stripping away our own stance.

Follow the logic of wisdom and then we'll see,
That not everything is what it appears to be.

Follow the unfortunate and terminal lives,
Ask what they desire? Nothing, just to survive.

Follow your heart when you are lost or a flounder;
Know you have choices, support from those around you.

Face these reflections, for mirrors only foresee;
The one looking back is who you are meant to be.

Reviews

[DCT ponderings]

I enjoyed this immensely. So many people look out side themselves as they move along there path missing that thee lessons/people are simply reflections. They mimic and lemming but never know self. So your ending was a knock out for me.

Face these reflections, for mirrors only foresee;
The one looking back is who you are meant to be.

In the second to last stanza I wanted more of an inward build leading towards the ending. But perhaps due to my own personal understanding that the strength you muster when you follow your heart isn't always supported. That it is knowing yourself intimately that will guide you through when lost and floundering (even alone). But like I said this is simply a personal filter. :)

[ANTO]

In the conformity that is required for a 'normal' life - to be part of 'society' we will lose our way and quite possibly our self.
Excellent writing Parsimony
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[ayosonolowo]

Hmm a splendid write, how i wish i could be talented as you.

[Soma-ko]

It's a mystery how we can be so mislead when there lays but a single path before us, and how lost we get on this single voyage we know as life. Lovely painting, and great poem. Much enjoyed.

[Parsimony]

Quite an astute observation. Thank you.

[Parsimony]

This poem just wrote itself. It was an enigma how easily it came together. Case in point, I never really studied sonnets in school yet this poem turned out to be symmetric.

[SyberRose]

Nicely penned...and loved the painting...Rose:)

[Sirius King]

pave your own way
i love this
especially the last few lines

great work!

[Rita L. Sev]

An inspiring poem; I enjoyed the couplet format. Well done!

[Samuel Jack]

Follow the logic of wisdom and then you'll see
Politics great transparency

I'm not attempting to improve your poem or anything, that just popped into my head while I was reading.
I like poems that are about the human condition and a lot of other things, I'm working on a poem for America.
This poem shifts across some big distances in a short space, really enjoyed it.

[Parsimony]

Nice adlib there.

[Aethereal]

This poem is a thinking man's poem! Great job! Your poem inspired me to write this gift poem for you to keep: Eleven syllables in each line:

Guiding Star

What path do we follow when we follow none?
Following none is just following that one.
None of us stops moving underneath the Sun.
Every guiding star is a son of a gun.

[Parsimony]

Nice impromptu response.

[Aethereal]

Returning a gift poem as part of my review helps to show how your poem inspired me. I think that it's in meter with perfect rhyme. You may do anything with it that you want to since it would not have been written without me reading your poem first.