Forever (Ft Tony Jordan)

A collaboration with Tony. A Poem about lovers. It was an honour to work with such an incredible poet. Big love to him. :)

She fell

Unarmed and unaware

He caught her

And he struck

Match after match

Until she could feel

See

Hear

Touch

Taste

Breathe

He carried her 

as she cooed

and the darkness 

that consumed

them both...

Gone

Instantly 

Forever

Forever in a spark

And forever love

grew

Inside their hearts

Their souls

Their minds and words

Never apart

Reviews

[Gee]

I don't fu#!/+g believe it, honest to God. As soon as my backs turned the pair of you are off, skulking in the shadows like Mr and Mrs Skulker from Skulkingtonshire. Planning, penning, posting a little duvet, no that ain't a typo, you two have been undercover, sneaky bedfellows......
For 17 years I have asked, begged, beseeched, implored ol' Tone to grant me the honour of a collab' , but no, niet, not a shagging chance, and then I see this.....GUTTED, with a capital GEE

[Tony Jordan]

*Shouts* - "Kathryn darling....it's that awful man from next door again...eh..?....yes the one who keeps trying to lick his ba*ls in the garden. What?? What do you mean he's here to deliver a vag mirror from the AVON catalogue...? ~@#*++$~#"& !!!!!!

[Gee]

Lol, how ya doing buddy ??

[Tony Jordan]

All the better for seeing you dude!
Yayy for the weekend - how's the job coming along?

[Gee]

Busy, busy, but settling in. Still trying to get to grips with it all. Cheers

[Kathryn Smith]

Ooooohhh Gee..Don't be too sad. ;) I'm sure T will let you work with him someday. lol

[Gee]

To late, gonna find myself someone else......oooo eee TK MAXXXXXX, where are yoooooooou

[Anjali]

Beautifully written poem. Thank you for sharing Kathryn :)

[Jordan Smith]

LOVE LOVE LOVE this poem!! Great job with this one! Loved the raw emotion that you brought out and also the true display of love that was portrayed in this one.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This one is flawless! And beautiful too!

"And forever love
grew

Inside their hearts

Their souls

Their minds and words

Never apart"

Loved these lines!
Great work, both of you☺

[Kathryn Smith]

Thanks Yumna!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Kathryn! ☺

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you Yumna!!!!
:))

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Tony! 😊

[Biswajeet Samal]

nice one mam good going keep it up..

[wordman]

sweet words of love,a fine duet !

[BBP]

Ya got me to like a sweet one! Lol well done you guys .. It flowed nicely and was a lovely tribute to being saved by love

[Kathryn Smith]

Score!! :D Glad you liked it. Thanks for the review. xx

[Tony Jordan]

Wow! A convert. That's awesome Bev.
Kathryn was the driving force in this. A great poet.
read moreWow! A convert. That's awesome Bev.
Kathryn was the driving force in this. A great poet.
Thank you very much !!
:)

[angeleapaugh]

Oh i fell in love.........!

[Kathryn Smith]

Me too! :D ;) lol Thanks for the review!

[B]

Love has its own ways
One expects regularity and conformity
What a bore life would be
If love was in any a resemblance of reality
The true joy of it
Exists in fantasy and the ability to dream

I love your structure and flow

[Tony Jordan]

My...that's beautiful right there SoloSolace
Deeply appreciate your musings on this one. read moreMy...that's beautiful right there SoloSolace
Deeply appreciate your musings on this one.
I was lucky to have such a romantic-hearted collaborator.
Thank you
:)

[Rynn]

I really liked how this was written, with such short, pointed lines. Very abrupt, it gives the piece a sense of power. The idea of someone kind of, re-igniting someone else's spark, or the fire within them is a striking on indeed. You engaged the senses by naming them off - which made me consider each sense very carefully -

smelling the smoke of the match that was lit,
seeing the light flare up and either fizzle out or burn,
the taste that smoke leaves in your mouth,
feeling the heat, and breathing in the smell of burning wood...

to me, it's like the quick flare up of that match was allegory for the essence of the love the man has for this woman.The only thing I would take a look at is the formatting. Think capitalization and punctuation, I likes the way it's lines are divided otherwise. It's very humbly crafted - simple but elegant. Well done.

-Rynn

[Kathryn Smith]

Thanks so much Rynn! If I am honest I have to say that Tony has helped build me back up and re ignited a spark of my own. :) Thank you again for your review. We appreciate it! xx

[Rynn]

Thank you for the read! Write on, lovely!

[Tony Jordan]

Thanks Rynn. Much appreciated!
:)