Trainwreck

They told me you were never going to let me get away

Both of my eyes were weighted...

I had to get away

I had to get away

 

She tried to escape

By jumping on a train

Pulsating

Panting

He followed her

He and she

They stood on the caboose

Whistling

Chugging

Steaming

He controlled her

Mocked her

Tried to change her

Tied her up

Saying:

"You don't get to have a say"

A heartbroken girl

He scolded her

For hurting

For writing through her hurt

For she had to love

HIM

So with tar

Black as death

He tried his best

To seal her lips

S

Sh

Shu

Shu

SHUT

Shu

Shu

Chu

Chu

Chug

Chug

Clang!

Screech!

Judgment day

All her beliefs

Her wildness

He frowned upon

Strangled

He was a lonely man

A man in despair

And In the cars

They heard her

But shrugged it off as the whistle

She was screaming

As the train roared

Speeding down the tracks

Wind in her hair

Tears in her eyes

She was shrieking

Fighting

With all her might

She pushed him off

Off the moving train

Right onto the tracks

He crashed

His body lay

Fading away

In the distance

She straightened her hat

Smoothed her dress

Picked up her suitcase

Made her way to her seat

And for the rest of the night

The passengers whispered

She's free

Finally

It was something

She could keep

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Phill Oz O'fee]

An abusive and controlling relationship poetically exposed through near desperate wordplay and dramatic stanza format throughout; you take the reader on your traumatic train ride of resistance, final retribution of the abuser and the liberation of the victim - a brilliant, albeit poignant piece - well written (bravo) … :-)

[Paul Bell]

Sort of like the idea of all the passengers collectively
Cheering and shouting. You done the right thing girl.
One way ticket to hell for him.

[Tony Jordan]

Fook!
You nailed the train motion in this - I nearly needed Dramamine to stay with your writing.
I got the feel of the moustache twiddling villain of the silent movie era whose dark piano motif must have given people the willies.
You certainly fixed his wagon. (Or caboose)
Bloody brilliant Kathryn.

:)

[Kathryn Smith]

hahah oh man you are the BEST bloody reviewer! Maybe I should put a caution warning before my work now. ;) lol I was even alarmed at how violent this was after I finished it. I don't even know where this idea came from..I genuinely wonder about my sanity sometimes. x

[Tony Jordan]

I wouldn't fret K.
You're not Ted Bundy and it's a free country as they say.
I enjoyed seeing your dark side.
:)