Brilliant; He, not Bukowski

Perfect.

 

 

 

We argued.

Standing among the richly lined isles

of a trillion like minds.

Brilliant; he, not Bukowski,

was trying to convince me of the finer

points to the man and his words

that I insisted reprobate.

He read a few of his lines

out loud

 thick black rims

balanced on the end

of his nose.

Brilliant; he, not Bukoswki.

I smiled tightly, slightly ticked

that I should be forced for

admirations sake,

poised; ready

to be made wrong

as he read him and made him

Brilliant; he not Bukoswki

Prince Charming, paused

in his read wearing a quirky

crooked smile claimed

"you're right, this sucks".

I have never loved him more

Brilliantly; He, not Bukowski.

Reviews

[robin]

You are like Bukowski to fall for such a fellow. Your mind yours bends to his and why? Woman, woman, woman.
Fantastic insanity playing games on thick rimmed's grave! Reprobate! Hope this crooked smile was worth lowering the draw bridge for. Of course it's true he is a d#nk: He and Bukowski. Well done!

[Alisa Js]

Hello R,

Yes indeed. I understand completely. There are those who happen in a lifetime ... those certain ones.

alisa ;-)

[Eve]

Hi beautiful, how are you? Thanks this is an old one but it still one of my faves :) I thought of you when it rained here recently and gave us double rainbows, it was incredible!

[Eve]

This is an brilliant write... wondering, He, not Bukowski, but... this feeling the write gave me, says so much more... I liked the "invisible feelers" you give your readers.

E.L.

[Eve]

E.l. are you back? I visited recently but you had closed shop, I am so glad to see you here and thank you so much, I hope you are feeling better :)

Yeah, I closed the shop, because I'm ill... and still am, but at least a little bit better than this weekend, couldn't walk anymore cause of dizzyness. It's a long way, but I try and fight it... Glad to be back, though, and read all the art, where I am attracted to... xo :)

[Eve]

well I hope it will not keep you from us for long, you are a sparkling gem :)

I try to be here for the ones I love... :) thanks dear xx

[Michael X]

lol, this poem here tickles the funny bone, its capturing in portrait emotion, and there is a giddy, blissfulness interwoven throughout the imgaery and colorful expression intention, the punctuating
detail tales one's thoughts, as you leave the reader swimming in your thoughts, almost in a flirting
context, sculpted to precise effect, this poem is a conversation between artisic minds, the delving,
depthful portryal is lightehearted yet rock solid, the style and form accentuate the awsome effects.

[Tara]

Brilliant. You. Not Bukowski. And your line breaks are Golden. Especially the last one. My favorite of yours right up there with the one about Rimbaud.

[Dan Gray]

I think it is excellent. Some of the line breaks seem arbitrary though. Also, I think you want to use "You're" in the dialogue at the end -- unless it is some sort of intentional misspelling. The image of the glasses was very strong, for me. Good work, I like it a lot.