Tumescent Red

 

I waited for you
longing for you to say
what you wanted
was too empty

and beneath me
your silk of summer madness
drowned in my liquid smile
I knelt in your malady
of fractured thoughts
slept in your shade
of pride,

cool stability unwinding
swallowed by your parched
finesse

Taste my reformist tongue

On conquered hips
my vanquished lips
tumescent red

and pulsing
your crush of mastery
bitten till they bled 
with my own desire.

© 2007 Somerista

Reviews

[Kasia A. Tilander]

At first glance when I saw the 'mature' content rating atop your work I prepared myself for something raw but as I read it became very clear that what you had written was very tasteful. The imagery in this piece is wonderfully passionate, giving the reader glimpses without revealing to much. Your poem is like a hot flirt on a cool summer night and I really enjoyed it.

Kasia.

[DrD]

There is only one word for you, Myth . . . . . prodigy. Your mastery of concept, design and the artistry of word selection and placement is astounding. You make me wish I was a few decades younger, I'd go looking for you. Thanks for this marvelous experience.

[Eve]

Blushing, well thank you so much DrD, I have never really thought so , but when this happens and someone thinks I am, I say thank you and then silently send a kiss to the person who influenced my mind and heart and taught me all I know by example. I miss him. Thank you for that reminder, though he is never far from my thoughts.

[zainul]

Enjoyed the superb work.
Congratulations!!!

[Eve]

Thank you Zainul :)

[zainul]

You are welcome,Myth :)

[Tara Jean Olson]

tastefully written, with a great conclusion

[ah]

extremely great writing, i loved it very much, keep it up

[Michael X]

i am stunned by the absolute imagery you render, how did i not review this masterfully scribed
work of abstract colors blending in a perfect mixture of art, thought, heart, ink, passionate vibrance,
the title Tumescent Red", reading this poem is truly like looking at a painting, its a pure visual. its nice
to read those few who brush the colors of written word on the readers mind, you are one the best
at such, the sensuality is subtly overwhelming, whispered desires, such ascending perspective.

[Barry S. Maltese]

I enjoy this type of sensual writing because it does not go over the top. You deliver a sexually intelectual piece here and do a great job at it.

[PianoandPage]

lush and imagery that pulses with life.

"taste my reformist tongue on conquered hips"

are you kidding me?

"silk of summer maddness" was also a favorite line of mine.

[V. Lucien Maier]

I like the flow, it keeps the reader reading good quality to have ;).

[S. P. Vaporis]

very sensual and presented in an incredibly supple way. i enjoyed this VERY much!

[Michael Lopez]

i likes i likes...
this is really good
it so sensual and its a great read.
keep up the good work.