Fallen

a poem about the Fallen light bringer

Fragmented memories echo through forgotten halls

as melancholic winds stir the dying leaves of Fall.

The evening sky blooms a pale dawn

as Lucifer fell into the Earth's yawn.

Author's Note

I posted this on here before but wasn't quite sure if I liked it...but meh, it deserves to be up with the rest of my crap ;P

Reviews

[Jason Kozlowski]

VERY SHORT!!! BAD? HELL NO! DESCRIPTIVE?! YES! I closed my eyes to see what you describe here in this beautiful poem and my god you have a mind for some great scenery.. just perfect and I plan to check out more poems of yours soon as I can! Again, very descriptive using the least amount of words it seems and that's so awesome!!!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

Quite expressive but seems as a fragment... still amazing

[Crimson_Catastrophe]

I like it, short but powerful.
Imagery is great, paints a very clear picture in my head.
Good piece.
Keep writing!

[Michael Soul]

fragmented memories not knowing if you thought off them first or something else thought of them. confusing feeling before or after mind mixing up not knowing what's what in shadows of long a go or a trick of the mind
i like rely what you have written here so much in so little words beautiful

[Kaylor Mason]

I think it's cool . . . Lucifer was called Lord of the Morning, I think

[L0v3craft]

i guess that's where 'Morning Star' comes from?

thank you for the review :3

[Fréyjä Helv..]

Perhaps the intro to an interesting story of Lucifer? Nice work...

[L0v3craft]

i like the idea of writing a dark fantasy novel/epic poem about him...but there's already a lot of those people have done xD

but thank you so much for the review :3

[Fréyjä Helvití]

ur very welcome... :)

[ewest1220]

I would hardly call it crap. It's short but in those few lines I got an entire story so, I'm satisfied! Great job!

[Danielle]

I love how you capture such depth in so few lines. You have talent!

[Hidden Happiness]

ohhh you should be punished for calling them crap... your writing are short but they have so much meaning and depth in them....this is really good writing
oh n pls read some of my stuff if you have the time.

[V]

I enjoyed this. It's ominous and sinister. I love "as melancholic winds stir the dying leaves of Fall. The evening sky blooms a pale dawn" It's a beautiful description.