Dragons Entwined

 

Dragon's Entwined

 

Dragon's entwined

a writhing nest

hissing chorus

forming a

sibilant voice

fortune teller

dream speaker

multi-color scales

a matte twist

rainbow pile

Reviews

[TLK]

I think this would be even better if the assonance of the sibilant 's' sounds was heightened even more. You do well with it in part - dragon'S, neSt, hiSSing choruS, Sibilant, Speaker, ScaleS, twiSt. If there were more careful placement of these sounds around the poem the words would echo the dragon chamber even better.

Also, it would be cool if each line were two words. "A writhing nest" would work perfectly as "writhing nest", at least to me. "multi-colour scales" could become "glinting scales" instead.

Both of these stylistic ideas would really reinforce the poem and make it blaze out like multi-coloured light to the reader.