Alone

Random poem

 And all you see is where else you could be when your at home

Alone

Alone

Am I alone

I feel alone

Everyone is alone

I am alone too

We are alone

Everyone is alone

Why did we get left aLoNe

Reviews

[Nate E. Flake (Cösmic ..]

i can feel this way sometimes! While alone it can be a good atmosphere to write!

[Kimberly Smith]

feel ya in so many ways..nice poem

[-Insertnamehere-]

Personally I think the best thing about this poem is that it displayed invisible emotion. Secretive emotion. You show no emotion but you still get the reader to feel it. Possibly as a replacement? But I sure as hell felt it. I also indeed loved how you started the first sentence with And. I hate when people say you can't start a sentence with And. They're liars. A lot of good sentences start with And. Like the first sentence of your poem for example.
Your repetitiveness of alone added intensity, therefore adding more to the invisible emotion. Every sentence had alone in it so constantly in my head I was repeating alone, alone, alone, alone, alone. It was like my heartbeat was beating with that word. Alone. Alone. Alone. Always alone.
Very well done Payton.

Well, C.A.B.S said you have no emotion, I don't see it either yet when you are alone you really have no emotions do you? Or at least none noticable by yourself, so actually this is an interesting peice, its unique in its own way.

Nikita

[C.A.B.S.]

I think the one thing this poem is lacking is emotion.

[Pookie]

Whoa...So true....love it ^.^

[Tears Forgotten]

random.. straight-line... but very uniquely true.... ^_^