You Said

It is short but it gets what im feeling.

 

 

 

You said, you wanted to be there

You said, you wanted to be a father to me.

You said, wow you said a lot but I found it all to be a lie.

Why?

Because you said,

Words say it all.

The words you said I believed.

Because you said.

Reviews

[Gregory Hill]

Hmmm, intersting it is a pretty good poem but could be much better if you fixed up the lines and messed with the syllable counts. You don't nesessarily have to make it rhyme but you should at least make it flow, posssible in iambic parameter. change off and on the syllable stresses. Anyways, good job.

[heido]

it's confusing, which i like because i imagine it's exactly as you feel