What A Wonderful World, She Thought

Something idle I did just now while I'm at work....I have no idea if it makes sense or not. Y'all be the judge.

Lost in a sea of false hope and hypocrisy,

She often wonders where the truth really lies.

The narcissism in us all oftentimes drives her to insanity

Her safe haven from the egotistical backstabbers

Nonsense and mayhem consume the masses.

She breathes thoughts of dampening destruction

Moving through crack pipe moonbeams and chaos,

Broken bones and fragile personalities

You are a mangled shadow of your former self.

Indifferent to her plight above all others,

Breathe in the stagnant fragrance of deceit and defeat;

How will they survive the poisoned air?

Lie on your back, love.

Cloud gaze while he re-rapes your innocence;

Just “one more day in paradise”

(8)Once upon a year gone by she saw herself give in.

Every time she closed her eyes she saw what could have been(8)

A life of lies, the deception.

Two-faced existence--

Run away, w***e-child

Clowns with dead faces chase after you;

Touching your body with rose shaped claws filled with their semen.

Run away, w***e-child.

 

A.  Carless

 

Reviews

[Pukka]

Your writing is powerful yet delicate. It makes perfect sense to me, and I think you handle a very sensitive subject wonderfully. There's a tone of hoplessness that's balanced out by the oddly beautiful images ('crack pipe moonbeams' and 'rose shaped claws' both really struck me.) If I had one point for improvement it would be to use a little more punctiation throughout as some lines ran on too far.