Flying Goodbyes

You see her walk away,

You see her close her eyes.

You see her let you go and

yet, you can't seem to stop.

She has given up, so let her be,

as she will not come back.

Not now, not for a while.

So take a deep breath,

for she is spiraling away.

But don't forget to open

the window, as her soul 

must fly to the seas.

You see her once more,

before the sun leaves,

and she waves goodbye,

so empty and still.

Reviews

[Seriana]

Funny I should come upon this poem of yours first, after my Nostalgia. Seems a precursor to what just happened in my life, lol. She is gone on the winds, sailing on a breeze over oceans deep. Yet her spirit can be seen in the waves.
I like it. Thank you for sharing.

[PandaPeaceful]

What a beautiful review Seriana. Thank you!

[BlackPrince]

There is a certain air of mystery to this poem!

Well, the overall sense that I get here is that sometimes move on (let go) from failed relationships in a healthy and respectful manner, without holding bitterness and a grudge.
Sometimes some things just ain't meant to be.
But the lessons that we learn can make us better people.

[PandaPeaceful]

There are so many ways in which we can perceive a poem. Your opinion is quite valid- as the story does relate to letting go. However, the process is never beautiful, nor bright. Thank you!

[Amrita]

I could sense strong emotions displayed in this poem.. Repetition in first three lines gives a great flow to poem..
And the last two lines hold such a strong impact..
Loved it :)

[PandaPeaceful]

Thank you!

[Unspoken poet]

This is really good, kinda tugs too, Enjoyed your words. love the imagery as well.

[PandaPeaceful]

Thank you!

[Nipplegrinder]

So much beauty, in melancholy. This is wonderful.

[PandaPeaceful]

What a beautiful review. Thank you!

[lightsong]

Your words paint an elegant sad image, goodbye, adieu, let go... and I think of death, how it can be beautiful like Your second verse... how we can sense, feel and know, what lays beyond our life. well done my dear, wonderful words.

[PandaPeaceful]

Thank you Avia.

[Avia]

Beautifully written, moving Just beautiful.

[PandaPeaceful]

I appreciate it. Thank you.

[The Iron Horseman]

Very moving. Well done. Your pain is very apparent.

[PandaPeaceful]

Thank you. I appreciate your review emmajoy.

[The Iron Horseman]

You're welcome.

[emmajoy]

Such a sadness of words.. so final, so desperate. Your first stanza paints a dark and stark picture but, the second verse seems almost kind, as if easing her flight away from you... a welcome death, perhaps.. it happens.

Painfully laid fine words.