I for sure liked the flow of it! Don't gravitate towards rhyme if you don't want to. It still sounds good. Whatever gets your thoughts across. I'd be curious to know, is it as straight forward as it seem? Did you write it about suicide or is there another intended meaning? Can't wait for future works! Keep it up!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
I'm happy you liked it! My initial thought concerning the poem was suicide. But it does have a much .. read moreI'm happy you liked it! My initial thought concerning the poem was suicide. But it does have a much deeper meaning. The protagonist was someone who you would categorize as pure and shy. The poem shows how people can truly turn into beasts and plainly make your life miserable. My intention was to show how sometimes, there are no happy endings. The way ou interpret the story however, is completely up to you.
Wonderfully worded. Rich with emotions and expressions
I feel you are talented enough to practice and improve on imagery and rhyme overtime
Can't wait to read more of your works
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
I truly appreciate your review! You don't know how much your comment helps me improve both as a writ.. read moreI truly appreciate your review! You don't know how much your comment helps me improve both as a writer, and as a person. Have a lovely day!
I for sure liked the flow of it! Don't gravitate towards rhyme if you don't want to. It still sounds good. Whatever gets your thoughts across. I'd be curious to know, is it as straight forward as it seem? Did you write it about suicide or is there another intended meaning? Can't wait for future works! Keep it up!
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
I'm happy you liked it! My initial thought concerning the poem was suicide. But it does have a much .. read moreI'm happy you liked it! My initial thought concerning the poem was suicide. But it does have a much deeper meaning. The protagonist was someone who you would categorize as pure and shy. The poem shows how people can truly turn into beasts and plainly make your life miserable. My intention was to show how sometimes, there are no happy endings. The way ou interpret the story however, is completely up to you.
Dark, but very deep and impressive to me.
I generally write in rhyme schemes, it's just how I've always done it, but I loved this. Keep up the good work.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you! I'll be sure to check out some of your work as well.
You did very well. I liked the flow of thoughts. You create places, situation and struggle. I liked the honest ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you, for leaving a comment- it really boosts my work.