"gingered leaves are dancing willy-nilly" this hits the brightest picture of autumn at the start of the poem.. I really love the imageries you have brought here, and I can feel the soft touches of autumn breeze passing by me... Lovely use of words to, we'll chosen and they makes the most clear imageries...
Sincerely
Dhiman
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
I'm so delighted you liked that line Dhiman! Thanks so much for your thoughts.
Nice wordplay, paying attention to how the words sound together in your well-crafted phrases, as much as trying to get a message across. I might've mentioned this to you before, but sometimes choosing many longer complex words can make a piece feel stilted & a little harder to read . . . but in the case of your piece here, it reads very lyrically, despite the complex words. I sometimes get jabbed for my love of longer complex words, so that's why I mention it. I've been told some people don't review me becuz they don't know half the words I use & they don't want to sound dumb. Not that this would change the way we write, but just good to know.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Actually, a few times. ;) I won't dumb it down, in this age of instant gratification, there's no re.. read moreActually, a few times. ;) I won't dumb it down, in this age of instant gratification, there's no reason to not look up a word, that's how I learnt them. :) Seriously, how much effort does that take?
You captured autumn in both her pensiveness and playfulness. The "sunset horizons
dreamily drifting further away" is a gorgeous line, wistful. Lovely verses!
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thanks so much, I guess we had the same inclination, it is a lovely season!
Ah, to roll in the autumn leaves and revel in its rhapsody -- such kind words we all have for this season, portent to the coming cold -- funny how we all like the prelims, but could skip the main show ...
Another speck of carbon, this one.
Sentient and sagacious, yet affable.
Advocate of Fantasy and Gaming, this one.
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