Sometimes a long string with many complex words like this can add a bit of a stilted sound to a poem, but in this case, it does not feel too cerebral . . . I can feel the passionate power all along, even tho your message feels like it's being spat out in somewhat of a well-crafted spiel. Your point is well-made & always relevant.
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8 Years Ago
I didn't think them complex but I understand what you're saying. It was spat out in a spiel sort of... read moreI didn't think them complex but I understand what you're saying. It was spat out in a spiel sort of. :)
8 Years Ago
I like using unusual or complex words, but sometimes in the heat of passion, it's more direct & hear.. read moreI like using unusual or complex words, but sometimes in the heat of passion, it's more direct & heartfelt if the word choices are short & straightforward. Either way, I am guilty of using complicated logic & messages sometimes, rather than gut-level spewing out of feelings.
aaaahhh disappointments, the place where reality and illusions meet and go "splat"... can relate to this as well, sorry it also happened to you.. but I guess there is no vaccine for this is there !!???
redzone
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
They need to come up with a vaccine, good idea! Thanks redzone.
Sometimes a long string with many complex words like this can add a bit of a stilted sound to a poem, but in this case, it does not feel too cerebral . . . I can feel the passionate power all along, even tho your message feels like it's being spat out in somewhat of a well-crafted spiel. Your point is well-made & always relevant.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
I didn't think them complex but I understand what you're saying. It was spat out in a spiel sort of... read moreI didn't think them complex but I understand what you're saying. It was spat out in a spiel sort of. :)
8 Years Ago
I like using unusual or complex words, but sometimes in the heat of passion, it's more direct & hear.. read moreI like using unusual or complex words, but sometimes in the heat of passion, it's more direct & heartfelt if the word choices are short & straightforward. Either way, I am guilty of using complicated logic & messages sometimes, rather than gut-level spewing out of feelings.
wow, the disappointment shouts in this poem...opposite ending to the fairy tale expected, anticipated.
a very moving and sad write...but done with such panache...
well done! smooth read ... well said says i! all fairy tales can not be ended in the sunshine eh!? i like the straight plain talk .. with swirls of sirens lace ... dangerous cliffs ... the old war dog and the angel ;)
E.
How interesting! It may only be that my eyes are tired after a great deal of wonderful reading, but this seemed to move almost too quickly. Don't misunderstand, of course, I loved it. I wish I had more experience with such lovely poetry so that I might give a better review, but very well done!
What a powerful glimpse into the soul of loving, of living to transform like a scene from a movie, but ending up so wanting, aching in the sorrow of it all.
Another speck of carbon, this one.
Sentient and sagacious, yet affable.
Advocate of Fantasy and Gaming, this one.
Artistic and pugnacious, yet subtle. more..