Autumn Leaves

Those dry withered dancers    

can flourish their skills,    
on streets, and rooftops,    
and sun-shaded hills.    
     
On sun-filtered sidewalks    
past burning bush flowers,    
tempestuous winds    
dance with them, for hours.

Reviews

[tumi]

well depicted, vivid imagery played the major role
great work..

[Bare trees]

Thanks very much, tumi. :)

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

i feel you captured the essence of traditional haiku in this piece. to describe an image of nature and allowing the reader to feel it rather than analyze it is what haiku is really about - counting syllables is only the outer form, not its intention. describing leaves as dancers is so evocative, and really brings to life the magical feeling of autumn. and the last two words "for hours" was so poignant. we adults, too busy with our stuff, can only take a moment to appreciate the season, but for these childlike leaves the day is endless.

[Bare trees]

I appreciate your comment, Ern. Thanks very much.