Sugary hills.

Sugary hills.

A Poem by Bare trees

Tina Palmer - RIBBONS OF SNOW original painting

Cold-biting breezes sweep sugary hills
as autumn is bitten by wintery chills.
And silky white snowdrifts, frozen in time,
enfold, like waves suspended.

Heavenly jewels sparkle bright
on powdered seas, where diamonds shine.

They shimmer on fields in tides of snow,
winking their crystal eyes at those
who promised their lover the stars.

On kitten's feet, they come at night,
adrift like feathers, floating light;
swaying to the hush of a Christmas song
whose winter chorus flutters along
to the lyrics
    of a whispering wind.

© 2024 Bare trees


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With great rhymes, you tell a hoary tale of winter's beauty soon to come. Fine work, my friend.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Bare trees

1 Month Ago

Thank you very much, Sam. :)
This is beautiful! I love the tone and the slightly out of reach romanticism that it gives winter almost as if it were a secret that you almost heard. I love the parallel to a song in the last stanza!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Bare trees

3 Years Ago

Thanks very much for your thoughts, Joey.
Made me think of children and parents snowball fighting. And having fun and also building a snowman with carrot nose and other things to use for eyes,ears, and mouth etc....

Posted 6 Years Ago


Bare trees

6 Years Ago

I'm glad you liked it.
Onlyme

6 Years Ago

I love the images held within your poems.
I loved your vivid poem. You put on display an awesome cadence filled with meaning and I appreciate that. Nice job!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Bare trees

6 Years Ago

Thank you Ranger.
that second stanza is magic.

"on powdered seas
where diamonds shine"

the imagery is stunning!


Posted 6 Years Ago


Bare trees

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Ana.
Papaya

6 Years Ago

welcome! :)
You have turned winter into something beautiful in this poem. The words are eloquent and create a glass half full sort of feeling toward winter, at least for me they did. Lovely job!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Bare trees

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Karen. :)
This is a great piece. I felt taken towards this place, as Autumn moved on to another place, and snow came in its place. Lovely poem full of much vivid imagery. Great Job

Posted 7 Years Ago


Bare trees

7 Years Ago

Thank you.
The cadence of your words are eloquent and most beautiful read aloud!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Bare trees

7 Years Ago

Thank you.
yawowsers

Not a word but it's my reaction - 'on kitten's feet' - brilliant, you sold me the whole thing on those few words

Posted 7 Years Ago


Bare trees

7 Years Ago

Thanks very much.
Are you Robert Frost? Because if you are, I would like to buy this.

Seriously though, the last two stanzas are just beautiful. I read this aloud to my wife. She patiently indulges me at best when concerning WC, but even she said that you should publish this and make some money.

Posted 7 Years Ago



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