"I HAVE NO FEARS...."

A girl betrayed by her lover....her last words to him.

As I go under the earth

To lie unseen, unheard,

Raise your eyes and look hard

One last time before we part;

Let your eyes fall on my face

Brushing away my pain,

Let  your tears soak me, and take

My blood with this rain;

Let this light cut me through

In million pieces apart,

Let there be nomore of you

In my beating heart;

Let my voice echo forever

My last few words,

Let the noise cease never

To ring on your nerves...

"Do not come to my grave

Bring no flowers,no tears;

I shall not answer you, my love

For, in here, I have no fears."

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[nora]

oh god, this is really beautiful. i love the flow of the words, which is lovely. the word choice is great too :) buut, just one thing: there was one verse where you didnt rhyme. in the first one, you use the words 'unheard and part' which dont rhyme. and in all the others, you do rhyme, like 'pain and rain' and 'apart and heart'. just a suggestionn :)

'As I go under the earth
To lie unseen, unheard,
Raise your eyes and look hard
One last time before we part'

even though it doesnt rhyme, this is my favorite stanza :D its really beautiful and i think it holds the most imagery! great job, padma! keep it up :)

[St.Jimmy]

really awesome and touching poem with a perfect flow and rhyme scheme
Good job!!

[Coyote Poetry]

A outstanding poem. Last lines is my opinion too. I want to be like the Native American. Allow my spirit to raise to the sky in peace. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Pancole's Jelly Bean]

Its really amazing..girlie.....

[deepesh]

bt here earth and unheard are rhyming and ard and part are rhyming....

fav liner "let the noise cease never" !

fantabulous !

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a beautiful poem... real nice the way you wrote it..i like it ....well written...

[nora]

oh god, this is really beautiful. i love the flow of the words, which is lovely. the word choice is great too :) buut, just one thing: there was one verse where you didnt rhyme. in the first one, you use the words 'unheard and part' which dont rhyme. and in all the others, you do rhyme, like 'pain and rain' and 'apart and heart'. just a suggestionn :)

'As I go under the earth
To lie unseen, unheard,
Raise your eyes and look hard
One last time before we part'

even though it doesnt rhyme, this is my favorite stanza :D its really beautiful and i think it holds the most imagery! great job, padma! keep it up :)

[bluessadmood]

Oh how nice ,when we answer cruel hearts ,strangely the words come so smooth,loving ,though blaming..
As I go under earth..unseen ,unheard,raise your eyes and look me hard,one more time before I part
Let your eyes feel my face,brush my pain..your tears soak me and take the blood along with the rain
The light cuts me pieces apart,want no more of you..never in my beating heart
My words sounding high,last few words,no more noise to ring on your nerves
Visit me not in my grave,bring no flowers ,no tears.i will not answer you
For in here I have no fears..strange,I am free of you
What loveliness ,just perfect ,everything is so beautiful
lovely write..